4/3 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[About the person I admire the most]
I am a researcher and I got married three years ago.
In korea, we call women who have a job and kids as working mom.
They have to work in company, but they also have to care their children.
Common job is not flexible, so, we can not control the working time by myself.
So, they need someone's help to care baby like grand mother or babysitter.
I don't have a baby now, but I want to have baby in the future.
But, sometimes it's a little bit scare to keep my career in the society.
Sometimes, I can meet super women who make a balance between work and family.
I am really admire to them include my mother.
강사 첨삭
Good evening [이름]!
I hope you had a great day.
Thanks for sending this.
See you tomorrow.
~Teacher Shanee^^,
I am a researcher and I got married three years ago.
>>> Correct!
In korea, we call women who have a job and kids as working mom.
In korea, we call women who have a job and kids as working mom.
>>> In Korea, we call women who have a job and kids as working moms.
They have to work in company, but they also have to care their children.
They have to work in company, but they also have to care their children.
>>> They have to work in their company and take care of their children.
Common job is not flexible, so, we can not control the working time by myself.
Common job is not flexible, so, we can not control the working time by myself.
>>> Our schedule is not flexible so we cannot control our working time.
So, they need someone\'s help to care baby like grand mother or babysitter.
So, they need someone\'s help to care baby like grand mother or babysitter.
>>> So, mothers need someone like their mother or a baby sitter to care for their baby.
I don\'t have a baby now, but I want to have baby in the future.
I don\'t have a baby now, but I want to have baby in the future.
>>> Correct!
But, sometimes it\'s a little bit scare to keep my career in the society.
But, sometimes it\'s a little bit scare to keep my career in the society.
>>> However sometimes, it\'s a little bit scary to keep my career in the society.
Sometimes, I can meet super women who make a balance between work and family.
Sometimes, I can meet super women who make a balance between work and family.
I am really admire to them include my mother.
>>> Whenever I meet women who can make balance between their work and their family, I am really impressed. I admire those kind of women just like my mother.
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