4/3 homework
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I don\'t think so.
I have best friends in my university period.
We met every day and had a lot of time together.
But, we had a different hobby and personality was also absolutely different.
We were in the same major, chemical engineering, but that\'s the only thing we did the same.
However, I think friends make me find a balance.
They help me having wide eyes and look around different aspects of the society.
And I can find a new hobby or interest in my mind.
We can learn from friends.
Sometimes we make friends having same hobby, in a club or social meeting.
The relationship is able to fall into the hobby more and give me deep experiences.
The point is that a hobby or taste is not the most influential factor when we are a friend.
The most important thing is whether the friend has a positive influence on me.
So, when we meet the friend, we have to perceive if I feel good or bad.
In my case, I don\'t like to make a relationship with a negative person, even if she/he has the same hobby.
강사 첨삭
Wow! That was quick! You are one diligent person, and that is great! This is a good essay. I agree with your idea. Even if we share the same hobby but his/her influence on me is not good, I will not be friends with that person.
-Rachel
I don\'t think so. I have best friends in my university period.
>> correct
We met every day and had a lot of time together.
We met every day and had a lot of time together.
>> We met everyday and spent a lot of time together.
But, we had a different hobby and personality was also absolutely different.
But, we had a different hobby and personality was also absolutely different.
>> correct
We were in the same major, chemical engineering, but that\'s the only thing we did the same.
We were in the same major, chemical engineering, but that\'s the only thing we did the same.
>> We had the same major, chemical engineering, but that\'s the only thing we had in common.
However, I think friends make me find a balance.
However, I think friends make me find a balance.
>> correct
They help me having wide eyes and look around different aspects of the society.
They help me having wide eyes and look around different aspects of the society.
>> They enlighten me/open my eyes and give me a different perspective of the society.
And I can find a new hobby or interest in my mind.
And I can find a new hobby or interest in my mind.
>> Because of that, I can find a new hobby or interest.
We can learn from friends.
We can learn from friends.
>> correct
Sometimes we make friends having same hobby, in a club or social meeting.
Sometimes we make friends having same hobby, in a club or social meeting.
>> correct (add the before same- the same)
The relationship is able to fall into the hobby more and give me deep experiences.
The relationship is able to fall into the hobby more and give me deep experiences.
>> The relationship makes me fall into the hobby more and gives me deep experiences.
The point is that a hobby or taste is not the most influential factor when we make friends.
The point is that a hobby or taste is not the most influential factor when we make friends.
>> correct (when we make friends- replace are with make)
The most important thing is whether the friend has a positive influence on me.
The most important thing is whether the friend has a positive influence on me.
>> correct
So, when we meet the friend, we have to perceive if I feel good or bad. In my case, I don\'t like to make a relationship with a negative person, even if she/he has the same hobby.
So, when we meet the friend, we have to perceive if I feel good or bad. In my case, I don\'t like to make a relationship with a negative person, even if she/he has the same hobby.
>> correct
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