4/30 homework

2019-05-01 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

학생이 쓴 원문

[What is your perception of beauty?] My motor for life is \"To be a beautiful person\". I think beauty is not only for appearance. When I meet a person, if she has a smile and warm face look, she looks more beautiful. He also too. The objectivity for the outward appearance of beauty disappears soon, I do. However, the indescribable beauty of words remains in the heart. In Korea, there is a famous phrase \"The face presents the years of life after the 50s\". It means that our face is changing according to the thinking or personality. The negative person has a gruff look and cold atmosphere, but, the positive person has a smile and peaceful feeling. So, I hope to be a really beautiful person in my old age.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for your homework. I appreciate your thoughts on this one. Good job! ^ ^ Beauty is not all about appearance, it\'s more of the persons\' attitude. 
-Teacher Jedah

My motor for life is \"To be a beautiful person\".
>>My motto in life is \"To be a beautiful person.\"
I think beauty is not only for appearance.
>>Correct
When I meet a person, if she has a smile and warm face look, she looks more beautiful. 
>>When I meet a person with a warm smile on her face, that person is already beautiful for me.
He also too. 
>>It is also the same with men.
The objectivity for the outward appearance of beauty disappears soon, I do.
>>The perception of outward beauty disappears.
However, the indescribable beauty of words remains in the heart. 
>>Correct
In Korea, there is a famous phrase \"The face presents the years of life after the 50s\".
>>Correct
It means that our face is changing according to the thinking or personality. 
>>That means our face changes appearance based on our thoughts and personality.
The negative person has a gruff look and cold atmosphere, but, the positive person has a smile and peaceful feeling. 
>>Correct
So, I hope to be a really beautiful person in my old age.
>>Correct

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