4-33th Homework

Hello there [이름]! :)
Thanks for doing your best to write a good essay for today.

I appreciate it a lot.

I think many people become a victim of the rat-race because of their greed and love for money.

They think that if they work hard today, they will eventually have a free time.

But that\'s not how things go at work.

Most of us spend money as fast as we earn it.

Most of us don\'t know how to save and invest.

We spend the money we earn because we think that on the next pay day or on the next promotion, we can always get more.

But that is not what happens.

I think the secret to having a long relaxation time is learning how to save and learning how to invest the money we saved.

That is my point-of-view in this matter.

I hope you\'re having a great day.

See you again tomorrow.

~Teacher C[이름] :)

Sometimes, we need a relax time even if it is difficult to take it.

>> Sometimes, we need a relaxation time even if it is difficult to do it.
When we debate about the success, many people think of the money as the symbol of it.

>> When we debate about success, many people think of money as a symbol for it.
The money is very closely related with the success in our life.

>> Money is very closely related with the success in our life.
Even if it is true, I want to say another fact.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Even if this is true, I want to state another fact.
The money is not all of the success.

>> Success in not all about money.
I think many people would agree with it, so they want to earn much money.

>> I think many people would agree with it. They want to earn much money.
Eventually, they miss the relax time, it\'s because they devote to get the money.

>> Eventually, they miss the relaxation time. It\'s because they devote their time to getting more money.
It\'s tricky.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> It is a trick.
We have to work hard in order to catch the ease time.

>> We have to work hard in order to have easy time.
However, we eventually don\'t catch it, and we just catch the tail of the money.

>> However, we eventually fail to catch it and we just catch the tail of the money.
Unfortunately, we don\'t reckon this situation.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Unfortunately, we don\'t think of this situation.
Nobody wants to work everyday, but nobody knows the pitfall of the money.
>> Nobody wants to work everyday but nobody knows the pitfall of money.
The money avid always for the attention of people.

>> Money avidly seeks for the attention of people.
If they don\'t take an attention to the money, it start to revenge on people.

>> If they don\'t give attention to money, it starts to revenge on people.
Eventually, people\'s attention return back the money and we become a slave of the money.

>> Eventually, people\'s attention return back to money and we become a slave of money.
It\'s a very sad situation.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> It\'s a very terrible situation.