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2013-12-23 · 첨삭 강사 Mona

학생이 쓴 원문

HIs mother can't stop crying in sorrow. heaving her shoulders, she sobbed quite a while. Feeling sad for her mother, Jane also sobbed by her mother. Her mother who forced herself to calm down after a moment consoled her husband. "honey, I'm sorry i made an unreasonable demand. Of course i kmow why you got sick. I was too depressed to control myself. Please forgive me. I'm sorry. Her husband kept quiet regarding what she said.

강사 첨삭

Hello there!

A brilliant morning!

In making sentences , you need to be careful with your capitalization.

\"I\" should  always be written in a capital form. Be careful also with the use of pronouns.

All in all, you were doing great! Keep it up:)

catch you later:)

~~T. Mona

 

HIs mother can\'t stop crying in sorrow.

>>Her mother can\'t stop crying in sorrow.
heaving her shoulders, she sobbed quite a while.
>>With shoulders  heaving, she sobbed for quite a while.
Feeling sad for her mother, Jane also sobbed by her mother.
>>Feeling sad for her mother, Jane also sobbed.
Her mother who forced herself to calm down after a moment consoled her husband.
>>After a momnet, her mother forced herself to calm down and consoled her husband. 
\"honey, I\'m sorry i made an unreasonable demand. Of course i kmow why you got sick.
>>\"Honey, I\'m sorry I made an unreasobanle demand. Of course, I know why ou got sick.\"
I was too depressed to control myself.

>>Correct!

Please forgive me.

>>Correct!

I\'m sorry.
>>Correct!
Her husband kept quiet regarding what she said.

>>Her husband kept quite listening to what she was saying.

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