4-40th Homework

Hello, [이름]! :)
Thank you for writing an essay. 

I agree that education is important because it makes us literate and assertive. 

Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.

I\'ll see you again tomorrow.

Take care. :)
~Teacher C[이름]

the education is a important method in order to deliver the knowledge to descendant.

>> [Do you mean]: The education is an important method in delivering knowledge to the people.
In the educational method, there are many things and tools.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> There are many things and tools found in the educational method.
The typical thing is the school.

>> The typical way to get educated is through the school.
We have to go to school when we reach a specific age that is generally set by the law.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> We need to go to school when we reach a specific age which is generally set by the law.
If we violate the law without any reasons, we might go to the jail.

>> If we violate the law without any reasons, we might go to jail.
The education is the main role of every nations.

>> [Do you mean]: Educating the people is the main role of every nation.
Before 20 centuries, many people couldn\'t get the chance of the education.

>> Twenty centuries ago, many people couldn\'t get the chance to be educated.

If they want to learn something, they have to pay a lot to a tutor.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> If they want to learn something, they need to pay a lot to a tutor.
The nation didn\'t charge in educating for the people.

>> The nation didn\'t take charge in educating the people.
So many people couldn\'t read a book or write the sentence including their mind.

>> So many people couldn\'t read a book or write the sentences they have in their minds.
At that time, a king used the education as a weapon to keep his power.

>> At that time, a king used education as a weapon to keep his power.
If normal persons don\'t know about the character, a governor could easily rule them.

>> [Do you mean]: If normal persons don\'t know anything, a governor could easily rule them.
Anyway, the education has to be balanced to all.

>> Anyway, education has to be balanced to all.
But nowadays the opportunity of the education seems to be unbalanced by the parent\'s wealth.

>> But nowadays the opportunity to be educated seems to be unbalanced and only depends on the parents\' wealth.