4-45th Homework
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Whenever I go to the market, there are so many goods attracting me.
Whenever I go to the market, I feel the desire that I want to buy all things on the market's shelves.
But I cannot do that, it's because I don't have enough money.
Anyway, there are so many goods in the market or mall attraction my mind.
When I chose something, I take a long time to collect a specific thing.
Sometimes, it could be a good thing that I save the money.
Nonetheless, I get the stress from it since I could not make a easy decision.
I know that even if I check and check to make an advantage from choosing something, after finishing it there were little different a fast choice from a slow choice.
But I could not change my mind when I make a choice.
Maybe, I have a troubling choice.
To buy the goods that I want to have is very exciting.
So many people want to earn a lot of money.
Maybe, Nobody hates the money.
We love the money but we must not become a slave of the money.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! :)
How\'s your Monday going so far?
Thank you for writing another essay.
I think most of us want to buy the things that we want.
I agree when you said that having money is good but we should not be a slave of it.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow. :)
~Teacher C[이름]
Whenever I go to the market, there are so many goods attracting me.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Whenever I go to the market, there are so many that I want to buy.
Whenever I go to the market, I feel the desire that I want to buy all things on the market\'s shelves.
>> Whenever I go to the market, I feel the desire to buy all things from the market\'s shelves.
But I cannot do that, it\'s because I don\'t have enough money.
>> But I cannot do that because I don\'t have enough money.
Anyway, there are so many goods in the market or mall attraction my mind.
>> Anyway, there are so many goods in the market or mall that attract me.
I chose something, I take a long time to collect a specific thing.
>> When I choose something, I take a long time to collect a specific thing.
Sometimes, it could be a good thing that I save the money.
>> Sometimes, it could be a good because I can save money.
Nonetheless, I get the stress from it since I could not make a easy decision.
>> Nonetheless, I get the stress from it since I could not make an easy decision.
I know that even if I check and check to make an advantage from choosing something, after finishing it there were little different a fast choice from a slow choice.
>> [Do you mean]: I know that even if I check and check to make an advantage from choosing something, I would realize that after finishing it, I only gained a little from making a slow choice.
But I could not change my mind when I make a choice.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But it\'s not easy for me to change my mind when I make a choice.
Maybe, I have a troubling choice.
>> Maybe I have a trouble in making a choice.
To buy the goods that I want to have is very exciting.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Buying the goods that I want is very exciting.
So many people want to earn a lot of money.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many people want to earn a lot of money.
Maybe, Nobody hates the money.
>> Maybe nobody hates money.
We love the money but we must not become a slave of the money.
>> We love money but we must not become a slave of money.Correction
How\'s your Monday going so far?
Thank you for writing another essay.
I think most of us want to buy the things that we want.
I agree when you said that having money is good but we should not be a slave of it.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow. :)
~Teacher C[이름]
Whenever I go to the market, there are so many goods attracting me.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Whenever I go to the market, there are so many that I want to buy.
Whenever I go to the market, I feel the desire that I want to buy all things on the market\'s shelves.
>> Whenever I go to the market, I feel the desire to buy all things from the market\'s shelves.
But I cannot do that, it\'s because I don\'t have enough money.
>> But I cannot do that because I don\'t have enough money.
Anyway, there are so many goods in the market or mall attraction my mind.
>> Anyway, there are so many goods in the market or mall that attract me.
I chose something, I take a long time to collect a specific thing.
>> When I choose something, I take a long time to collect a specific thing.
Sometimes, it could be a good thing that I save the money.
>> Sometimes, it could be a good because I can save money.
Nonetheless, I get the stress from it since I could not make a easy decision.
>> Nonetheless, I get the stress from it since I could not make an easy decision.
I know that even if I check and check to make an advantage from choosing something, after finishing it there were little different a fast choice from a slow choice.
>> [Do you mean]: I know that even if I check and check to make an advantage from choosing something, I would realize that after finishing it, I only gained a little from making a slow choice.
But I could not change my mind when I make a choice.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But it\'s not easy for me to change my mind when I make a choice.
Maybe, I have a troubling choice.
>> Maybe I have a trouble in making a choice.
To buy the goods that I want to have is very exciting.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Buying the goods that I want is very exciting.
So many people want to earn a lot of money.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Many people want to earn a lot of money.
Maybe, Nobody hates the money.
>> Maybe nobody hates money.
We love the money but we must not become a slave of the money.
>> We love money but we must not become a slave of money.Correction
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