4.5 days work week
학생이 쓴 원문
I think shorter working hours are international trend. And a lot of studies and researches show that long-hour work or overwork doesn\'t ensure more productivity. Industrial accidents due to overwork or long hour work shrink workers\' productivity. In fact, according to the OECD, Korean workers overwork and surpass the global average of work hours.
강사 첨삭
Hi, Gi [이름]!
I agree! I think working longer hours sometimes exhausts us more, leading to poor performance and slower efficiency. Also, just a quick note on grammar, for the last sentence, instead of using ‘surpass,’ I changed it to ‘exceed.’ ‘Surpass’ means to go beyond or be better at something, like achievements, but ‘exceed’ means to go beyond a limit, so I think it’s better to use when talking about working hours.
- T. Caitlyn
I think shorter working hours are international trend.
>> I think shorter working hours are an international trend.
And a lot of studies and researches show that long-hour work or overwork doesn\'t ensure more productivity.
>> A lot of studies and research show that long working hours or overwork don\'t ensure more productivity.
Industrial accidents due to overwork or long hour work shrink workers\' productivity.
>> Industrial accidents caused by overwork or long working hours reduce workers\' productivity.
In fact, according to the OECD, Korean workers overwork and surpass the global average of work hours.
>> In fact, according to the OECD, Korean workers work overtime and exceed the global average working hours.
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