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학생이 쓴 원문
My English name is [이름] and I am 41 years old. I originally come from Busan and I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old.
I am married and I have two daughters. Of course I have one husband.
It is just my kidding.
I can't learn in university because my family were very poor when I was young.
But it's Okay.
I have been working for the parts of car company in Gyeonggi-do Province.
I like my job and I am a luck woman because I have my job.
I want to work in my office for a long time.
Also I want my family to be happy for many years to come.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름] -I appreciate you doing this for me.
Now, I have learned more about you.
You are a hardworking woman and responsible too.
I hope that you will continue to receive more blessings.
I\'ll talk to you later.^^
= Teacher Bella =
My English name is [이름] and I am 41 years old.
>> Correct!
I originally come from Busan and I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old.>> I am originally come from Busan then I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old.
I am married and I have two daughters.
>> Correct!
Of course I have one husband.
>> Correct!It is just my kidding.
>> I\'m just kidding.
I can\'t learn in university because my family were very poor when I was young.
>> I didn\'t get the chance to study in a University becase my family was very poor then.
But it\'s okay.
>> Correct!I have been working for the parts of car company in Gyeonggi-do Province.
>> I have been working with a car company in Gyeonggi-do Province.
I like my job and I am a luck woman because I have my job.
>> I like my job and I am a lucky woman for having one
I want to work in my office for a long time.
>> Correct!Also I want my family to be happy for many years to come.
>> Also, I want my family to be happy for the years to come.
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