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2015-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Bella

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My English name is [이름] and I am 41 years old. I originally come from Busan and I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old. I am married and I have two daughters. Of course I have one husband. It is just my kidding. I can't learn in university because my family were very poor when I was young. But it's Okay. I have been working for the parts of car company in Gyeonggi-do Province. I like my job and I am a luck woman because I have my job. I want to work in my office for a long time. Also I want my family to be happy for many years to come.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름] -I appreciate you doing this for me. Now, I have learned more about you. You are a hardworking woman and responsible too. I hope that you will continue to receive more blessings. I\'ll talk to you later.^^   = Teacher Bella =     My English name is [이름] and I am 41 years old. >> Correct! I originally come from Busan and I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old.>> I am originally come from Busan then I moved to Gyeonggi-do Province with my family when I was 14 years old. I am married and I have two daughters. >> Correct! Of course I have one husband. >> Correct!It is just my kidding. >> I\'m just kidding. I can\'t learn in university because my family were very poor when I was young. >> I didn\'t get the chance to study in a University becase my family was very poor then. But it\'s okay. >> Correct!I have been working for the parts of car company in Gyeonggi-do Province. >> I have been working with a car company in Gyeonggi-do Province.   I like my job and I am a luck woman because I have my job. >> I like my job and I am a lucky woman for having one I want to work in my office for a long time. >>  Correct!Also I want my family to be happy for many years to come. >> Also, I want my family to be happy for the years to come.  

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