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School education didn\'t contributed to who I am as much as the people I met through my life. I learned informations from schools, however my personality, how I communicate with other people is learned from experience. I also think that people don\'t succeed only because good education. I don\'t even think that we have good education. Education bacame competition when it has to be a way to help students find what they enjoy. In addition, it isn\'t a fair competition either. There are three things for competng to be fair. That is having equal opportunity, no cheating throughout the competition, and rewarding gap shouldn\'t be far between the \'winner\' and the \'lost\' ones. Unfortunately, our education lacks all three, and therefore it is not a good education, or good competition. Even if it has been a good education, there are still many variables such as luck, the people you meet. Therefore it is hard for people to succeed because of good education alone.
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>>> TEACHER GEMMA
School education didn\'t contributed to who I am as much as the people I met through my life.
>>> CORRECT
I learned information from schools, however my personality, how I communicate with other people is learned from my experiences.
>>> CORRECT
I also think that people don\'t succeed only because of good education.
>>> CORRECT
I don\'t even think that we have a good education.
>>> CORRECT
Education has become competitions when it has to be a way to help students find what they enjoy.
>>> CORRECT
In addition, it isn\'t a fair competition either.
>>> CORRECT
There are three things for competing to be fair.
>>> CORRECT
That is having equal opportunity, no cheating throughout the competition, and rewarding gap shouldn\'t be far between the \'winner\' and the \'lost\' ones.
>>> CORRECT
Unfortunately, our education lacks all three, and therefore it is not a good education, nor a good competition.
>>> CORRECT
Even if it has been a good education, there are still many variables such as luck, the people you meet.
>>> CORRECT
Therefore it is hard for people to succeed because of good education alone.
>>> CORRECT
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