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Hello there pretty [이름]! You have a very good point of view with fashion. I agree that it is now used like an art or to express oneself. That is amazing point of view. Very good! I would like to see you as a reporter someday. Hmm.. Thank you for giving extra effort in doing your assignment. I appreciate it! Hmm.. I\'ll see you in our class! And keep practicing!
Would you like to be a fashion model?
>>> YOU CAN SAY: No I want to be an announcer ( or a reporter).
- I don\'t know....
>>> CORRECT.
OR: I am not really sure what life they have.
- Fashion is original, to protect the body
>>> YOU CAN SAY: Fashion is original. And it is first and foremost, to protect the body.
But But now it is used as a means to express themselves.
>>> YOU CAN SAY: But today, it a means to express oneself.
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