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2011-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Vaness

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And I realized that whenever I help someone I always feel the value given, even to little things such as plants and flowers. Now I believe I would be very happy to work as a flight attendant through these experiences and my major as well. Actually, I have failed in a flight attendant interview. But I didn't give up and I will never give up. I don't want to look down keeping in mind that i'm happy since there is my dream and real goal in life. All of you guys, you are still young and still have many opportunities, so make a dream through your experience. I think when people have a dream, they are sparkling brightly. I am sure If you find your dream then you will be fine and happy like me. Thank you for listening and for your time. Let's all be happy!

강사 첨삭

Almost done.^^   And I realized that whenever I help someone I always feel the value given, even to little things such as plants and flowers. >> CORRECT Now I believe I would be very happy to work as a flight attendant through these experiences and my major as well. >> CORRECT Actually, I have failed in a flight attendant interview. >> CORRECT But I didn\'t give up and I will never give up. >> CORRECT I don\'t want to look down keeping in mind that i\'m happy since there is my dream and real goal in life. >> I don\'t want to look down keeping in mind that I\'m happy since there is my dream and real goal in life. (Capitalization) All of you guys, you are still young and still have many opportunities, so make a dream through your experience. >> CORRECT I think when people have a dream, they are sparkling brightly. >> I think when people have a dream, they sparkle brightly. I am sure If you find your dream then you will be fine and happy like me. >> I am sure if you find your dream then you will be fine and happy like me. (Capitalization) Thank you for listening and for your time. >> CORRECT Let\'s all be happy! >> CORRECT

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