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학생이 쓴 원문
> Can one enjoy a hobby without having to spend anything?
Yes, we can. If we really have things we are keen on sincerely and can focus on, we could enjoy it as a hobby. As for me, every i am down or lazy i used to draw sketches listening to music or look for exhibition i like and then visit. These are necessary things to live me more energetic and be satisfied with. If it is anything that i can be better before and be happy, we can enjoy a hobby rather than spending time for them.
강사 첨삭
Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. You\'re right, a good hobby does not need to cost you a lot. There are so many things people can enjoy for free.
- T. Beth
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Yes, we can. >>> correct
If we really have things we are keen on sincerely and can focus on, we could enjoy it as a hobby.
>>> correct
>>> OR: If there is something we are really passionate about and can focus on, we could enjoy it as a hobby.
As for me, every I am down or lazy i used to draw sketches listening to music or look for exhibition i like and then visit.
>>> As for me, every time I am down or lazy I used to draw sketches, listening to music or looking for exhibition I like and then visiting them.
These are necessary things to live me more energetic and be satisfied with.
>>> These are necessary things to live more energetic and be satisfied.
If it is anything that i can be better before and be happy, we can enjoy a hobby rather than spending time for them.
>>> If it is anything that I can be better with than before and be happy with, I can enjoy a hobby rather than just spending time for it.
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