4. Has your nominee contributed to improving dermatological care of patients in underserved areas of
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1. Leadership at Society Board Member level or equivalent national level dermatology organization, including involvement in task forces and committees. (max. 100 words)
Dr. [이름] served as an assistant administrator of Atopic Dermatitis (AD) Task Force to develop the Korean AD Treatment Guideline in2014. She is the first author of the related article. She is now actively participating Severe AD Task Force of Korean AD Association to help severe AD patients have benefited from the national insurance program.
She has involved in Urticaria Task Force to develop Korean Chronic Urticaria Guideline in2017-2018.
She has been an Insurance and Education committee member of Korean Dermatological Association.
She has served as a scientific director of Korean Hair Research Society, and an advisory committee member of National Patient Classification system.
Dr. [이름] has written several valuable articles. The representative articles are as bellow:
>> Dr. [이름] served as an assistant administrator of the Atopic Dermatitis (AD) Task Force to develop the Korean AD Treatment Guidelines in 2014. She is the first author of a related article which you can find bellow. She is currently an active participant of the Severe AD Task Force of Korean AD Association that helps severe AD patients to get financial assistance from the national insurance program. She was involved in the Urticaria Task Force to develop Korean Chronic Urticaria Guidelines in 2017 to 2018. (It’s probably better to specify the month when it started and the month when it ended, if it has ended, otherwise, we can specify the target finish date.) She has been a member of the Insurance and Education committee of the Korean Dermatological Association. She also served as scientific director of the Korean Hair Research Society, and an advisory committee member of the National Patient Classification system.
Dr. [이름] has written several valuable articles. The representative articles are as follows:
2. Involvement in international dermatology programs, initiatives and congresses. (max. 100 words)
***programme is the spelling of program in British English.
Dr. [이름] was granted by Korean government as the Basic Research International Cooperative Projects in2017. She has started co-studying about wound healing and stem cell research at the UC Irvine in USA.
She was actively participated in the program of ancillary meeting of contact dermatitis when World Congress Dermatology was held in South Korea in 2011. She is a regular member of Americal Academic Dermatology. She has attended a few annual meeting of AAD, JEADV, ASDP, ASDS, EADC, WCHR and ESDR for recent couple of years. She was also a recipient of travel grant in 2017 WCHR.
I would like to recommend her as a candidate of ILDS awards. I believe that she is enough qualified and passionate to receive the grant. This great opportunity will definitely encourage her to keep on building her international leadership and humanitarianism and serve as a foundation for her career.
>> Dr. [이름] received a grant from the Korean government for the Basic Research International Cooperative Projects in 2017. She has started co-studying about wound healing and stem cell research at the UC Irvine in USA. She has actively participated in the program of ancillary meeting of contact dermatitis when the World Congress Dermatology was held in South Korea in 2011. She is a regular member of Americal Academic Dermatology. She has attended several annual meetings of AAD, JEADV, ASDP, ASDS, EADC, WCHR and ESDR over the past couple of years. (*** Or you can just remove over the past couple of years.) She was also a recipient of a travel grant in 2017 WCHR. I would like to recommend her as a candidate for the ILDS awards. She is a very passionate and innovative person. She is determined to make a difference in the field of dermatology that would benefit a lot of people. I believe that she is qualified to receive the grant. This great opportunity will definitely encourage her to keep on building her international leadership and humanitarianism and serve as a foundation for her career.
4. Has your nominee contributed to improving dermatological care of patients in underserved areas of
Yoncheon is one of the northest province in South Korea, which lacks the medical facilities. Dr. [이름] has visited there with her hospital’s medical service team a s a dermatologist. About 50 residents could see a doctor due to her visit and be treated with proper drugs.
She also contributed to improve alienated people’s dermatological condition by providing her medical services and comprehensive care at KKotdongne while staying with them for a week. KKotdongne is a small village for people who were disabled and disregarded from their families in Korea. About 30 patients were benefited from her voluntary service.
She has involved in the medical service to Joseph Clinic during her residency period. The clinic is cost-free hospital run by Catholic Church. She volunteered the medical services and did her best to give them some dermatological advice. Owing to her dermatological care, about hundreds of people who were not easily accessible to hospital due to poverty were properly diagnosed and given relevant knowledge as well as prescriptions.
>> Yoncheon is one of the provinces in the northern part of South Korea, which lacks medical facilities. Dr. [이름] has visited there with her hospital’s medical service team as a dermatologist. Due to her visit, about 50 residents was treated and given proper medications. She also contributed to improve alienated people’s dermatological condition by providing her medical services and comprehensive care at KKotdongne while staying with them for a week. KKotdongne is a small village for people who were disabled and disregarded from their families in Korea. About 30 patients benefited from her voluntary services. She has been involved in providing medical services at Joseph Clinic during her residency period. The clinic is a cost-free hospital run by the Roman Catholic Church. She provided medical assistance voluntarily and did her best to give them dermatological advice. Owing to her dermatological care, about hundreds of people who were not able to get medical attention due to poverty were properly diagnosed and given relevant knowledge as well as prescriptions.
Q5. Last year, a group meeting of patients with alopecia totalis and universialis has been launched. As a member of Korean Hair Research Society (KHRS), she has been involved in the developing the patient committee. The population of the patient committee are comprised of about 50 patients and their family members.
She also played an important role in a group meeting of children with alopecia totalis and alopecia universialis in Korea. This project is called as Green Hair Campaign, which is held by KHRS. The participants were 30 childrens and their siblings and of their parents and they were taught about the disease etiology and management and enjoyed activities . She helped all the preparation and progression of the event and supported them academically and mentally. All participants (N=) including the children and their family had a bonding time and shared their sufferings.
>> Last year, a group meeting of patients with alopecia totalis and universialis has been launched. As a member of the Korean Hair Research Society (KHRS), she has been involved in developing the patient committee. The population of the patient committee is comprised of about 50 patients and their family members. She also played an important role in a group meeting of children with alopecia totalis and alopecia universialis in Korea. This project is called Green Hair Campaign, which is hosted by the KHRS annually. (OR: This project is called Green Hair Campaign, which is held annually by the KHRS).The participants were 30 children, their siblings and their parents. They were also taught about the disease etiology and management and enjoyed other various activities. She helped in the preparation and progression of the event and supported them academically and mentally. All participants (N=) including the children and their families had a bonding time and shared their struggles.
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