4. Relationship with JBC & ISPULS

2011-05-16 · 첨삭 강사 Verna

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After Representive director chagned last year, their attitued has chagned to us. Previous representive director would like to push us strongly as local style. At that times, Michelle and I had a hard time from their control. So Michelle has a regret and feel inconvenience. She setted our company and got over a difficulty as member of beginning. 5.My thinking of Turner I like Turner's ideas and style, values. I was premoted to manager this year. So i want to grow with Turner in the near future. If there is a chance to work other region, I want work there.

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Here are more suggestions Ma뭓m [이름]. 뻋. Dona

After Representive director chagned last year, their attitued has chagned to us.

>> After the Representive Director was chagned last year, their attitude has changed towards us.

Previous representive director would like to push us strongly as local style.

>> The previous Representive Director would like to push us strongly for local style.

At that times, Michelle and I had a hard time from their control.

>> At that time, Michelle and I had a hard time from their control.

So Michelle has a regret and feel inconvenience.

>> So Michelle had  regrets and felt inconvenient.

She setted our company and got over a difficulty as member of beginning.

>> She set our company and got over  difficulties as a member of a new beginning.
5.My thinking of Turner

>> What I think about Turner
I like Turner's ideas and style, values.

>> Correct!

I was premoted to manager this year.

>> I was promoted as a manager this year.

So i want to grow with Turner in the near future.

>> So I want to grow with Turner in the near future.

If there is a chance to work other region, I want work there.

>> If there is a chance to work in other regions, I want to work there.

 

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