4 river project

2011-04-13 · 첨삭 강사 Christine

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The gorvernment in Korea decided to start 4 river project. The project will destroy the eco-system of rivers, so many environment movement organizations have opposed it strongly. If the project is completed, many rare animals will be dead. I wish that the gorvernment make a decision after they think deeply.

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Hi [이름]..Yes, I've heard about the news. Your government actually is planning to restore these four major rivers in your country. But this is to provide water security, flood control and eco system vitality in your country. This would be a good preventive measure for the security of the people in your counrty but yes, it would also destroy the habitat of some animals living in these rivers. Glad that you are aware of the current events in your country?lt;O:P> Thank you for composition. The gorvernment in Korea decided to start 4 river project. >>>The Korean government decided to restore the four major rivers in Korea.(Be careful with your spelling)The project will destroy the eco-system of rivers, so many environment movement organizations have opposed it strongly. >>>The project could destroy the eco-systems of the rivers, so many environment organizations have opposed it strongly. >>>The project could destroy the eco-sytems of the rivers so many environmentalists strongly oppose the plan.If the project is completed, many rare animals will be dead. >>>If the project will be completed, many rare animals will die. >>>If the project will be completed, many endangered species will die.I wish that the gorvernment make a decision after they think deeply. >>>I wish the government will think deeply before finalizing their plans or decisions.

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