40. Homework
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When I was young, I saw a movie, I think it was, Charlie and the Chocolate Factory?
That time, I already saw how detrimental effect of technology.
On the other hand, I would be a hypocrite that it only brings negative consequences as I enjoy surfing the internet, not to mention, working using the Internet, ha! ha!
Q: Do you think technology will threaten manpower in the future?
>>CORRECT!
Business man whom always thinks about how to save money wants to cut down the cost.
>>A businessman who always thinks about saving money wants to cut down the cost.
Hence, they introduced equipment for a manpower replacing since it can work 24 hours consistently without complaining.
>>CORRECT!
Furthermore, it also brought improved quality of the items that they produced.
>>CORRECT!
Additionally, it has decreased damage of human’s life so they would not be able to need to pay for an industrial disaster victim anymore.
>>Additionally, it has decreased damage to human life so they would not need to pay for an industrial disaster victim anymore.
For example, photographers have been lost their job owing to digital camera.
>>For example, photographers have lost their job owing to digital camera.
After the digital camera has been used commonly, people didn’t need to go to photo studio taking pictures since they could take and print it themselves in their house.
>> After digital cameras have been used commonly, people didn’t need to go to photo studios since they could take and print it out themselves in their house.
On the other hand, deliver workers have been increased because of the internet shopping after people prefer to buy goods in their house.
>>On the other hand, the number of delivery workers has increased because of internet shopping after people prefer to buy goods at home.
Anyways, the fact, technology developing has already threatened manpower.
>>Anyways, the fact, technology development has already threatened manpower.
But I think that it might not replace all manpower since equipment has been operated by human.
>>However, I don\'t think that it might replace all manpower since all equipment is operated by humans.
Furthermore, population has been decreased all of world. So it will diminish to threaten people more.
>> Furthermore, world population has been decreased, so its threat to people will diminish even more.
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