43. Homework

2018-01-11 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. Nowadays, celebrities increasingly have the status of role models, in particular for younger people. Do you see this as a positive or negative development? In my opinion, the definition of role model is a person who lives right ways and eligible to get admiring from others. Hence, it works a positive development rather than negative way. People want to be same as the role model since the person had already gotten an achievement that they wanted to do. Sometimes, it gives them a vain dream which is the same as buying lotto. Even if they couldn’t be as their role model, it is okay for them that I think. At least they also might be a good person, since they get dreams, establish to get goals and come over when they get hard time following their role model.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for doing this, Jason^^

It actually depends on the person or celebrity :)

If they serve as an inspiration, then that is okay; however, if they are into drugs, that is absolutely a no-no.

See you later!

Q. Nowadays, celebrities increasingly have the status of role models, in particular for younger people.

>>CORRECT!

Do you see this as a positive or negative development?
>>CORRECT!
In my opinion, the definition of role model is a person who lives right ways and eligible to get admiring from others.
>>
In my opinion, the definition of role model is a person who lives the right way and is eligible to get admiration from others.
Hence, it works a positive development rather than negative way.
>>
Hence, it works as a positive development rather than negative way.
 People want to be same as the role model since the person had already gotten an achievement that they wanted to do.
>>
 People want to be the same as the role model since the person had already gotten an achievement that they wanted.
Sometimes, it gives them a vain dream which is the same as buying lotto.
>>
Sometimes, it gives them a vain dream which is the same as buying a lottery ticket.
Even if they couldn’t be as their role model, it is okay for them that I think.
>>
Even if they couldn’t be their role model, I think it is okay for them.
At least they also might be a good person, since they get dreams, establish to get goals and come over when they get hard time following their role model.

>> At least they also might be a good person, since they get dreams, establish goals and come over when they get a hard time following their role model.

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