43. Homework
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Thank you very much for doing this, Jason^^
It actually depends on the person or celebrity :)
If they serve as an inspiration, then that is okay; however, if they are into drugs, that is absolutely a no-no.
See you later!
Q. Nowadays, celebrities increasingly have the status of role models, in particular for younger people.
>>CORRECT!
Do you see this as a positive or negative development?
>>CORRECT!
In my opinion, the definition of role model is a person who lives right ways and eligible to get admiring from others.
>>In my opinion, the definition of role model is a person who lives the right way and is eligible to get admiration from others.
Hence, it works a positive development rather than negative way.
>>Hence, it works as a positive development rather than negative way.
People want to be same as the role model since the person had already gotten an achievement that they wanted to do.
>> People want to be the same as the role model since the person had already gotten an achievement that they wanted.
Sometimes, it gives them a vain dream which is the same as buying lotto.
>>Sometimes, it gives them a vain dream which is the same as buying a lottery ticket.
Even if they couldn’t be as their role model, it is okay for them that I think.
>>Even if they couldn’t be their role model, I think it is okay for them.
At least they also might be a good person, since they get dreams, establish to get goals and come over when they get hard time following their role model.
>> At least they also might be a good person, since they get dreams, establish goals and come over when they get a hard time following their role model.
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