45. Homework

2018-01-15 · 첨삭 강사 Rose

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Q. Do you agree that there is a right age for young adults to stop living with their parents? I don’t know other’s rule regarding of the age for young adults to stop living with their parents since I didn’t think about it seriously. Most of my friends have been living with their parents until now and if I make it classify which people live away from their parents than I think there are 3 ways regarding of the reasons. First, people who are eager to live independent life or had a dream to live alone without any disturbing live away from their parents. Second, people who had already got married stop living with their parents since they don't want to get any disturb doing important things at night. Third, people who work at other countries or cities far from their hometown live far from their parents because they don't have any other choices owing to the stress regarding of the long distance commute. I don’t know that I have to agree or disagree. Since I got confused about the question haha… So I just want to finish writing this.

강사 첨삭

Thank you very much for writing this paragraph, Jason^^

Many years ago, I wanted to live away from my parents because of indepence.

Now, I want to live with my father to save money! Ha! Ha!

See you tomorrow~

I don’t know other’s rule regarding of the age for young adults to stop living with their parents since I didn’t think about it seriously.

>>I don’t know others\' rule regarding the age for young adults to stop living with their parents since I didn’t think about it seriously.

 Most of my friends have been living with their parents until now and if I make it classify which people live away from their parents than I think there are 3 ways regarding of the reasons.

>> Most of my friends have been living with their parents until now and if I classify the reason why people live away from their parents then I think there are 3 major ones.
First, people who are eager to live independent life or had a dream to live alone without any disturbing live away from their parents.
>>
First, people who are eager to live an independent life or had a dream to live alone without any disturbing their parents.
Second, people who had already got married stop living with their parents since they don\'t want to get any disturb doing important things at night.
>>
Second, people who are already married stop living with their parents since they don\'t want to get disturbed doing important things at night.
Third, people who work at other countries or cities far from their hometown live far from their parents because they don\'t have any other choices owing to the stress regarding of the long distance commute.
>>
Third, people who work at other countries or cities far from their hometown live far from their parents because they don\'t have any other choices owing to the stress of the long distance commute.
I don’t know that I have to agree or disagree.

>>I don’t know whether I have to agree or disagree.
Since I got confused about the question haha… So I just want to finish writing this.

>> Since I got confused about the question, I just want to finish writing this, ha! ha!

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