46. Homework

Thank you for writing this paragraph, Jason^^

I think we have to keep everything balanced.

Working too hard defeats our real purpose.

See you!

I just make an example regarding of the question below.

>>I just made an example regarding the question below.
 A man who will be promoted soon had an appointment to travel with his family and he already booked the flight tickets and reserved a hotel that they will stay during vacations.

>> A man who will be promoted soon had an appointment to travel with his family and he already booked the flight tickets and reserved a hotel where they will stay during vacations.

 But, unfortunately, a boss asked him work at the day that he wanted to have a vacation because they met a serious problem which they have to fix.

>> But, unfortunately, the boss asked him to work on the day that he wanted to have a vacation, because they met a serious problem which they have to fix.

 Furthermore, sadly, there is no one who can replace his position while he is going on a journey.

>>CORRECT!

Besides, if the project will be failed, he will lose the chance to be promotion.

>>Besides, if the project will fails, he will lose the chance to get the promotion.

And he has been really eager to get an opportunity this since some of his friends already promoted before him.

>>And he has been really eager to get this opportunity since some of his friends already got promoted before him.

Thus, he has to choose between going to travel with his family to keep his appointment and apology to his family about he can’t go together.

>>Thus, he has to choose between traveling with his family to keep his appointment and apologizing to his family because he can’t go with them.
 Most of people who work under company might choice the thing which they will go for a working instead of their family because of the fact that if they will not work, they might get penalties from the various ways.

>> Most of people who work for companies might choose working instead of their family because of the fact that if they do not work, they might get penalties in various ways.

 Moreover, in the worst case, they can not support and take care of their family anymore if they would be fired owing to the choosing vacation with the family.

>>Moreover, in the worst case, they can not support and take care of their family anymore if they would be fired owing to the  vacation with the family.
 Therefore, these cultures, I think it’s not only in Korea, have to be changed making each people’s life happy

>>Therefore, this culture which I think does not only in Korea, has to be changed in order to make each person\'s life happy