4th August.

2011-08-04 · 첨삭 강사 Faye

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I have to make sure that I want to achieve something in my life. I'm not satisfied with my property eventhough I already had a house and a car. I think that the problem is my standard about the stability of the fortune. I really want to save the money which it is enough to spend in my whole life as soon as possible. But it's not easy to accomplish that. Without parents's supporting or Without a specially job. If someone dreams something without way, it maybe make him very stressed. So, first of all, I have to decide the goal how much I want to save. And then, I have a planning to meet the goal and do it steadly. I think that is only solution about this. Everyone knows this, but everyone is also suffering without solving. I'm also in that case. ^^

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]! Everybody is in the state of saving much for the future but because of this global crisis we are experiencing, that would not be p[ossible. Everybody wants to save but what we get is not enough for us. Maybe the government or the globe would try to do something about it not just thinking of themselves but also for the welfare of their fellowmen. I understand the state you are in and it is really difficulkt to achieve that it just means we have to stive harder to reach that goal. See you tomorrow! - T.Faye -   Here are your corrections: I have to make sure that I want to achieve something in my life. >>Correct!I'm not satisfied with my property eventhough I already had a house and a car. >>I'm not satisfied with my properties, eventhough I already have a car and a house.I think that the problem is my standard about the stability of the fortune. >>I think the problem is my standards of the stability of the fortune. >>I think the problem is the stability of the fortune.I really want to save the money which it is enough to spend in my whole life as soon as possible. >>I really want to save money that would be enough to spend in the future.But it's not easy to accomplish that. >>Correct! Without parents's supporting or Without a specially job. >>Without parents?support or job.If someone dreams something without way, it maybe make him very stressed.>> If someone dreams something without way, it might make him very stressed. So, first of all, I have to decide the goal how much I want to save. >>So first, I have to decide a goal that makes me save a lot.And then, I have a planning to meet the goal and do it steadly. >>And then, I have a plan to meet the goal and do it steadily.I think that is only solution about this. >>I think that is the only solution.Everyone knows this, but everyone is also suffering without solving. >>Correct! I'm also in that case. ^^ >>Correct!

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