4th Nov\'s artivle
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Should everybody have a right to strike or should employers have the right to fire employees who chose not to work?
In my opinion, I agree with that. Because if who wasn\'t hired by employments don\'t make the voice, Definitely people will don\'t pay attention to the low employment rate. So, we need to make a strong mind to strike.
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Should everybody have a right to strike or should employers have the right to fire employees who chose not to work?
In my opinion, I agree with that.
>> CORRECT.
>> I agree with this.
Because if who wasn\'t hired by employments don\'t make the voice, Definitely people will don\'t pay attention to the low employment rate.
>> Because if the unemployed will not stand up and make their voices heard, people will not pay attention to the low employment rate.
So, we need to make a strong mind to strike.
>> So, we need to have the courage to strike.
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