5/1 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[What would you rather do; travel around the world for a whole year or be with your family in your hometown for a year?]
If I can choose, I want to travel around the world for a whole year.
We can not buy experience and realization from them.
My hometown or nation is small, the earth is so huge and there are so many different culture and environment.
I want to see and feel them.
I think the person having many experiences is different from others.
They are not shaken by the little one.
They know their values and direction of life.
We have much concern and worry.
I heard that most of the concern and worry is not will happen.
If I can travel so many countries and meet many various people, I will control my life only from my angle.
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If I can choose, I want to travel around the world for a whole year.
>>Correct
We can not buy experience and realization from them.
We can not buy experience and realization from them.
>>Experience is not something that can be bought.
My hometown or nation is small, the earth is so huge and there are so many different culture and environment.
My hometown or nation is small, the earth is so huge and there are so many different culture and environment.
>>Correct
I want to see and feel them.
I want to see and feel them.
>>I want to see and experience them.
I think the person having many experiences is different from others.
I think the person having many experiences is different from others.
>>Correct
They are not shaken by the little one.
They are not shaken by the little one.
>>They are not shaken by minor things in life.
They know their values and direction of life.
They know their values and direction of life.
>>They know their values and their direction in life.
We have much concern and worry.
We have much concern and worry.
>>We have a lot of concern and worries.
I heard that most of the concern and worry is not will happen.
I heard that most of the concern and worry is not will happen.
>>But, I heard that most of our concerns and worries don\'t actually happen.
If I can travel so many countries and meet many various people, I will control my life only from my angle.
If I can travel so many countries and meet many various people, I will control my life only from my angle.
>>If I could travel to so many countries and meet different kinds of people, I can view my life at so many different angles.
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