5/10 homework

2019-05-10 · 첨삭 강사 Jedah

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[Should humans be allowed to use other animals as objects of sport and entertainment?] It has to be prohibited as law. I think the human is also an animal. My mom has two dogs. I really realized any animals have their own mind even if they can not conversate with a human after bringing two dogs. My mom\'s two dogs cannot say with human, but, often we can feel what they want to do. It\'s amazing. Sometimes I feel the dogs are better than me for my mom. They also feel the human\'s feeling or atmosphere, and sometimes they console us. I really hate the person who takes lightly animals\' life. They should feel the same situation by animals.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름]! Thanks for doing your homework. I really appreciate it! ^ ^
Nice thoughts on this one. “Animals are such agreeable friends—they ask no questions; they pass no criticisms.” –George Eliot
-Teacher Jedah

It has to be prohibited as law.
>>It has to be passed as a law.
I think the human is also an animal. 
>>I think humans are also animals.
My mom has two dogs. 
>>Correct
I really realized any animals have their own mind even if they can not conversate with a human after bringing two dogs. 
>>I realized after having two dogs, that animals have their own minds even if they can not talk/converse with us.
My mom\'s two dogs cannot say with human, but, often we can feel what they want to do.
>>My mom\'s two dogs couldn\'t say what they want the way we speak, but we often understand and feel what they want.
It\'s amazing. 
>>Correct
Sometimes I feel the dogs are better than me for my mom. 
>>Correct
They also feel the human\'s feeling or atmosphere, and sometimes they console us. 
>>Correct
I really hate the person who takes lightly animals\' life. 
>>I really hate the person who takes animals lives for granted. 
They should feel the same situation by animals.
>>They should feel how animals feel too.

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