5-10th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Nobody can know one's future.
Sometimes, people think that if they can know their future, they would be happy.
Is it true?
I suppose that I can predict the coming events, for example, lottery numbers, car accidents.
I will become a rich and I will don't go there where I would be injured.
In the modern society, especially, the capitalism, the money is very important to live without any problems.
In the capitalism, the money could solve any problems even if it is related with the personal life.
It may be very serious but it is true.
So, many people want to get the money as possible as much.
We work everyday in order to get the money, no one give me the money without any labor.
Anyway, if people can know my future or coming events, the first thing that they want to do may be to know the lottery numbers.
It is the easiest thing to get money without any efforts.
Of course, it is impossible.
So, it is just a hope that they want.
Of course, I want it too.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Thanks for taking the time to write an essay.
I think nobody could accurately predict their future but they can certainly make an intelligent guess. :)
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름]
Nobody can know one\'s future.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> No one can predict his or her future.
Sometimes, people think that if they can know their future, they would be happy.
>> Sometimes, people think that if they would know their future, they would be happy.
Is it true?
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Is that true?
I suppose that I can predict the coming events, for example, lottery numbers, car accidents.
>> I suppose that I can predict the coming events; for example, lottery numbers and car accidents.
I will become a rich and I will don\'t go there where I would be injured.
>> I will become rich and I will not go to a place where I would be injured.
In the modern society, especially, the capitalism, the money is very important to live without any problems.
>> In the modern society, especially in a capitalistic society, money is very important if we want to live without any problems.
In the capitalism, the money could solve any problems even if it is related with the personal life.
>> In capitalism, money could solve any problems even if it is related with personal life.
It may be very serious but it is true.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It may be quite serious but that is the truth.
So, many people want to get the money as possible as much.
>> So, many people want to get money as much as they can.
We work everyday in order to get the money, no one give me the money without any labor.
>> I work everyday in order to get money because no one would give me money without any labor.
Anyway, if people can know my future or coming events, the first thing that they want to do may be to know the lottery numbers.
>> Anyway, if people can know about the future or about the coming events, the first thing that they would want to do is maybe to know the lottery numbers.
It is the easiest thing to get money without any efforts.
>> It is the easiest way to get money without any efforts.
Of course, it is impossible.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Of course, that is not possible.
So, it is just a hope that they want.
>> So, they are just hoping for it.
Of course, I want it too.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Of course, I am also hoping for it too.
Thanks for taking the time to write an essay.
I think nobody could accurately predict their future but they can certainly make an intelligent guess. :)
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름]
Nobody can know one\'s future.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> No one can predict his or her future.
Sometimes, people think that if they can know their future, they would be happy.
>> Sometimes, people think that if they would know their future, they would be happy.
Is it true?
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Is that true?
I suppose that I can predict the coming events, for example, lottery numbers, car accidents.
>> I suppose that I can predict the coming events; for example, lottery numbers and car accidents.
I will become a rich and I will don\'t go there where I would be injured.
>> I will become rich and I will not go to a place where I would be injured.
In the modern society, especially, the capitalism, the money is very important to live without any problems.
>> In the modern society, especially in a capitalistic society, money is very important if we want to live without any problems.
In the capitalism, the money could solve any problems even if it is related with the personal life.
>> In capitalism, money could solve any problems even if it is related with personal life.
It may be very serious but it is true.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It may be quite serious but that is the truth.
So, many people want to get the money as possible as much.
>> So, many people want to get money as much as they can.
We work everyday in order to get the money, no one give me the money without any labor.
>> I work everyday in order to get money because no one would give me money without any labor.
Anyway, if people can know my future or coming events, the first thing that they want to do may be to know the lottery numbers.
>> Anyway, if people can know about the future or about the coming events, the first thing that they would want to do is maybe to know the lottery numbers.
It is the easiest thing to get money without any efforts.
>> It is the easiest way to get money without any efforts.
Of course, it is impossible.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Of course, that is not possible.
So, it is just a hope that they want.
>> So, they are just hoping for it.
Of course, I want it too.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Of course, I am also hoping for it too.
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