5.12 homework

2020-05-13 · 첨삭 강사 Beth

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> Is there anything about your appearance you would like to change? What is it? My appearance i would like to change is color of my eye. It is hard to change but blue or green eye color make person look attractive. In fact, brown i have is the most common eye color in the world. A few women in twenties often wear color lens for beauty although it is harmful to eye health.

강사 첨삭

Hello [이름]. Thank you for this. I would also want to have a greenish gray eye color, so I wear colored lenses sometimes. It does look attractive. 
- T. Beth
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My appearance i would like to change is color of my eye. 
>>>> The part of my appearance I would like to change is the color of my eyes.  
It is hard to change but blue or green eye color make person look attractive. 
>>>> It might be difficult to change but blue or green eye color makes a person look attractive.  
In fact, brown i have is the most common eye color in the world. 
>>>> In fact, the brown eyes which I have is the most common eye color in the world.  
A few women in twenties often wear color lens for beauty although it is harmful to eye health.
>>>A few women in their twenties often wear colored lenses for beauty although it is harmful to the eyes.    

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