5-15th Homework
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As we are getting old, I think that an important thing to maintain is a health.
In order to do it, the food and the exercise are a good method.
When I was growing up, I didn't eat meats well like a pork, a beef and a chicken.
Even though I didn't eat so much meats, I hadn't stunted.
So, I don't recognize the need of proteins.
Nowadays, I started to reckon its need as I saw my mother who got a surgery.
She could not easily recover her health before a surgery.
Doctor said that it's because her body don't contain a lot of a necessary element to recover the health.
That is the meat protein.
So, I start to eat the meat but it is very limited.
Actually, I don't actively eat the meat and if there is the meat on the table I would eat it.
I don't like eating the chicken so much.
To live without any sickness, we have to eat various foods to be able to supply the nutrition.
The exercise also is important to keep your health as you are getting old.
The doctor recommends doing it twice in a week.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
Weekend is fast approaching! kkk. ^^
Thank you for writing an essay.
I think health is the greatest wealth that we could have nowadays in this stressful world.
It is very difficult to achieve and it is easily lost.
I hope you and your family would always be healthy.
I am also hoping that your mom would regain her good health back soon.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
As we are getting old, I think that an important thing to maintain is a health.
>> As we get old, I think an important thing to maintain is health.
In order to do it, the food and the exercise are a good method.
>> In order to do it, eating healthy food and having proper exercise are good methods.
When I was growing up, I didn\'t eat meats well like a pork, a beef and a chicken.
>> When I was growing up, I didn\'t eat meat well like pork, beef and chicken.
Even though I didn\'t eat so much meats, I hadn\'t stunted.
>> Even though I didn\'t eat so much meat, I hadn\'t stunted.
So, I don\'t recognize the need of proteins.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> So, I don\'t recognize the need for proteins.
Nowadays, I started to reckon its need as I saw my mother who got a surgery.
>> Nowadays, I start to reckon its need as I saw my mother who got a surgery.
She could not easily recover her health before a surgery.
>> She could not easily recover her health before her surgery.
Doctor said that it\'s because her body don\'t contain a lot of a necessary element to recover the health.
>> The doctor said that it\'s because her body doesn\'t have a lot of a necessary elements to recover her good health.
That is the meat protein.
>> One of the things that she lacks is meat protein.
So, I start to eat the meat but it is very limited.
>> So, I started to eat meat but it is very limited.
Actually, I don\'t actively eat the meat and if there is the meat on the table I would eat it.
>> [Do you mean]: Actually, I don\'t actively eat meat. I only eat meat when it\'s served on the table.
I don\'t like eating the chicken so much.
>> I don\'t like eating chicken so much.
To live without any sickness, we have to eat various foods to be able to supply the nutrition.
>> To live without any sickness, we have to eat various food to be able to supply the adequate amount of nutrition.
The exercise also is important to keep your health as you are getting old.
>> Exercise is also important to keep your health as you get old.
The doctor recommends doing it twice in a week.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The doctor recommends that we exercise twice a week.
Weekend is fast approaching! kkk. ^^
Thank you for writing an essay.
I think health is the greatest wealth that we could have nowadays in this stressful world.
It is very difficult to achieve and it is easily lost.
I hope you and your family would always be healthy.
I am also hoping that your mom would regain her good health back soon.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
As we are getting old, I think that an important thing to maintain is a health.
>> As we get old, I think an important thing to maintain is health.
In order to do it, the food and the exercise are a good method.
>> In order to do it, eating healthy food and having proper exercise are good methods.
When I was growing up, I didn\'t eat meats well like a pork, a beef and a chicken.
>> When I was growing up, I didn\'t eat meat well like pork, beef and chicken.
Even though I didn\'t eat so much meats, I hadn\'t stunted.
>> Even though I didn\'t eat so much meat, I hadn\'t stunted.
So, I don\'t recognize the need of proteins.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> So, I don\'t recognize the need for proteins.
Nowadays, I started to reckon its need as I saw my mother who got a surgery.
>> Nowadays, I start to reckon its need as I saw my mother who got a surgery.
She could not easily recover her health before a surgery.
>> She could not easily recover her health before her surgery.
Doctor said that it\'s because her body don\'t contain a lot of a necessary element to recover the health.
>> The doctor said that it\'s because her body doesn\'t have a lot of a necessary elements to recover her good health.
That is the meat protein.
>> One of the things that she lacks is meat protein.
So, I start to eat the meat but it is very limited.
>> So, I started to eat meat but it is very limited.
Actually, I don\'t actively eat the meat and if there is the meat on the table I would eat it.
>> [Do you mean]: Actually, I don\'t actively eat meat. I only eat meat when it\'s served on the table.
I don\'t like eating the chicken so much.
>> I don\'t like eating chicken so much.
To live without any sickness, we have to eat various foods to be able to supply the nutrition.
>> To live without any sickness, we have to eat various food to be able to supply the adequate amount of nutrition.
The exercise also is important to keep your health as you are getting old.
>> Exercise is also important to keep your health as you get old.
The doctor recommends doing it twice in a week.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The doctor recommends that we exercise twice a week.
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