5-16th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
It's getting cold as time goes by.
We are already in end of this year without any notices.
Whenever a new year starts, I feel that time is very fast.
And I think another year starts again.
The life given to me is very short, and doesn't have enough time to waste.
But we don't reckon it until we become an old.
Nobody can predict a future whether it would be good or not.
Sometimes, we might be taken an accident without our willingness.
Sometimes, we might get a lot of fortune without notice.
Sometimes, I think how to live my life and how to make my life.
Normally, we save the money to conveniently live after retiring.
However, it is not easy since we have to spend a lot of money to keep my life.
After retiring, when we want to enjoy my life, there would be a problem. typically health.
At that time, we don't have enough an energy to enjoy, all thing is useless.
Even if the money is important to keep our life, I think the most important thing is health.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
It\'s Friday already! Hooray!
Thank you for writing this essay.
You\'re right when you said we only have one life to live so we need to take care of ourselves.
Stay healthy and happy. :)
See you again next week. ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
It\'s getting cold as time goes by.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s starting to get colder.
We are already in end of this year without any notices.
>> [Do you mean]: We have reached the end of this year and we haven\'t noticed it.
Whenever a new year starts, I feel that time is very fast.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I feel that time is very fast whenever a new year starts.
And I think another year starts again.
>> I also think that another year will start again.
The life given to me is very short, and doesn\'t have enough time to waste.
>> The life given to me is very short and I cannot waste it.
But we don\'t reckon it until we become an old.
>> But we don\'t reckon it until we become old.
Nobody can predict a future whether it would be good or not.
>> Nobody can predict whether the future would be good or not.
Sometimes, we might be taken an accident without our willingness.
>> Sometimes, we might get into an accident without our willingness.
Sometimes, we might get a lot of fortune without notice.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are times when we gain a lot of fortune without us noticing it.
Sometimes, I think how to live my life and how to make my life.
>> Sometimes, I think of how to live my life and how to make my life.
Normally, we save the money to conveniently live after retiring.
>> Normally, we save money to conveniently live after retiring.
However, it is not easy since we have to spend a lot of money to keep my life.
>> However, it is not easy since we have to spend a lot of money to sustain our daily living.
After retiring, when we want to enjoy my life, there would be a problem. typically health.
>> After retiring we want to enjoy life but there are problem sometimes especially the ones related to health.
At that time, we don\'t have enough an energy to enjoy, all thing is useless.
>> At that time, we don\'t have enough energy to enjoy and everything is useless.
Even if the money is important to keep our life, I think the most important thing is health.
>> Even if money is important to stay alive, I think the most important thing is health.
It\'s Friday already! Hooray!
Thank you for writing this essay.
You\'re right when you said we only have one life to live so we need to take care of ourselves.
Stay healthy and happy. :)
See you again next week. ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
It\'s getting cold as time goes by.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s starting to get colder.
We are already in end of this year without any notices.
>> [Do you mean]: We have reached the end of this year and we haven\'t noticed it.
Whenever a new year starts, I feel that time is very fast.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I feel that time is very fast whenever a new year starts.
And I think another year starts again.
>> I also think that another year will start again.
The life given to me is very short, and doesn\'t have enough time to waste.
>> The life given to me is very short and I cannot waste it.
But we don\'t reckon it until we become an old.
>> But we don\'t reckon it until we become old.
Nobody can predict a future whether it would be good or not.
>> Nobody can predict whether the future would be good or not.
Sometimes, we might be taken an accident without our willingness.
>> Sometimes, we might get into an accident without our willingness.
Sometimes, we might get a lot of fortune without notice.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There are times when we gain a lot of fortune without us noticing it.
Sometimes, I think how to live my life and how to make my life.
>> Sometimes, I think of how to live my life and how to make my life.
Normally, we save the money to conveniently live after retiring.
>> Normally, we save money to conveniently live after retiring.
However, it is not easy since we have to spend a lot of money to keep my life.
>> However, it is not easy since we have to spend a lot of money to sustain our daily living.
After retiring, when we want to enjoy my life, there would be a problem. typically health.
>> After retiring we want to enjoy life but there are problem sometimes especially the ones related to health.
At that time, we don\'t have enough an energy to enjoy, all thing is useless.
>> At that time, we don\'t have enough energy to enjoy and everything is useless.
Even if the money is important to keep our life, I think the most important thing is health.
>> Even if money is important to stay alive, I think the most important thing is health.
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