5-18th Homework

2017-11-03 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

A robot is commonly used in all places to support human's work, for example, cleaning, simple repeat working, and security. Someone misunderstand the robot that looks like a human. But even if the robot don't look like a human, it would be a robot. In a factory, there are many machines to make goods instead of workers. That is actually the robot. This ears would become familiar with the robot. When I was growing up, the robot was in some cartoons. So, some children who was interested in the robot wanted to be a robot scientist. I also wanted to be such a scientist but I didn't do it. In my house, there are several robot for my convenience. A cleaning robot help me clean my house automatically. There is a security camera to protect and to watch my children's safe, it is also such a robot. There may be several robot in each house. Nowadays, one of the place that use the robot would be a factory to save the money. The owner wants to reduce the cost for producing the goods.

강사 첨삭


Hi, [이름]! ^_^
Wow! This is your last essay from this lot. 
Thank you for always doing your best to write good essays.
I honestly believe that robots have made our lives much easier and more convenient. 
Most of us find it hard to live life without this machine. 
I think robots are the future. kkk.
I hope you\'re doing great. 
See you on Thursday. :)
~Teacher C[이름] 
A robot is commonly used in all places to support human\'s work, for example, cleaning, simple repeat working, and security.
>> 
A robot is commonly used in all places to support human work; for example, cleaning, simple & repeated tasks, and security.
Someone misunderstand the robot that looks like a human.
>> 
Someone misunderstood the robot that looks like a human.
But even if the robot don\'t look like a human, it would be a robot.
>> 
But even if the robot doesn\'t look like a human, it would be a robot.
In a factory, there are many machines to make goods instead of workers.
>> 
In a factory, there are many machines that replaced workers in making goods.
That is actually the robot.
>> 
They are actually robots.
This ears would become familiar with the robot.
>> [Do you mean]: This era is familiar with robots. 
When I was growing up, the robot was in some cartoons.
>> 
When I was growing up, a robot was shown in some cartoons.
So, some children who was interested in the robot wanted to be a robot scientist.
>> 
So, some children who were interested in robots wanted to be a robot scientist.
I also wanted to be such a scientist but I didn\'t do it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I also wanted to become one but I didn\'t pursue it. 
In my house, there are several robot for my convenience.
>> 
In my house, there are several robots used for my convenience.
A cleaning robot help me clean my house automatically.
>> 
A cleaning robot helps me clean my house automatically.
There is a security camera to protect and to watch my children\'s safe, it is also such a robot.
>> 
There is a security camera that protects and watches out for my children\'s safety and it is also a robot.
There may be several robot in each house.
>> 
There may be several robots in each house.
Nowadays, one of the place that use the robot would be a factory to save the money.
>> 
Nowadays, one of the places that uses a robot would be a factory. They do this to save money.
The owner wants to reduce the cost for producing the goods.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> 
The owner wants to reduce the cost in producing goods.

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