5/19 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
For people who have been steadily exercising, enrolling online physical fitness classes is very positive nowadays.
Moreover, if it is an online group fitness and getting together online, it will be more helpful.
But I think working out outside is better than home training.
Home is a very familiar place and sometimes it makes us bored.
I know it depends on personality because some people very like to stay at home.
But, in my case, I feel mentally circulate when I work or stay open air.
Or when I work out together with others, I feel more energetic.
Nowadays, although it is very difficult to exercise outside, working, or driving or finding stars at the stary night is very helpful for struggling mentally.
I strongly realized these days how important mental health in my life.
Human beings are really unscientific, especially mentally.
However, the most important thing is to start something new to overcome mentally.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름],
Thanks once again for this insightful response to the homework you were given. It is true, mental health is important especially in dire situations like where we are in now, so we have to always take care of our mental aspect. So, cheer up! We are here for you. ^^
-Rachel
For people who have been steadily exercising, enrolling online physical fitness classes is very positive nowadays.
>> correct (we just add in after enrolling- enrolling in)
Moreover, if it is an online group fitness and getting together online, it will be more helpful.
Moreover, if it is an online group fitness and getting together online, it will be more helpful.
>> Moreover, it is more helpful because people can get together online.
But I think working out outside is better than home training.
But I think working out outside is better than home training.
>> correct
>> I think working out outdoors is better than doing it indoors.
Home is a very familiar place and sometimes it makes us bored.
Home is a very familiar place and sometimes it makes us bored.
>> correct
I know it depends on personality because some people very like to stay at home.
I know it depends on personality because some people very like to stay at home.
>> correct (we just say some people prefer to stay at home)
But, in my case, I feel mentally circulate when I work or stay open air.
But, in my case, I feel mentally circulate when I work or stay open air.
>> But in my case, my brain circulates well when I work or stay in an open air.
Or when I work out together with others, I feel more energetic.
Or when I work out together with others, I feel more energetic.
>> correct
Nowadays, although it is very difficult to exercise outside, working, or driving or finding stars at the starry night is very helpful for struggling mentally.
Nowadays, although it is very difficult to exercise outside, working, or driving or finding stars at the starry night is very helpful for struggling mentally.
>> correct (we just say looking at the stars on a starry night is very helpful for people who are struggling mentally)
I strongly realized these days how important mental health in my life.
I strongly realized these days how important mental health in my life.
>> I strongly realized these days that mental health is important in my life.
Human beings are really unscientific, especially mentally.
Human beings are really unscientific, especially mentally.
>> correct
However, the most important thing is to start something new to overcome mentally.
However, the most important thing is to start something new to overcome mentally.
>> correct ( we just say to overcome mental issues)
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