5/20 homework

2020-05-20 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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I think they should do that. They have to care about the environment and prepare future energy sources. I understand that energy-related companies destroy the environment to produce energy that we can use. They drill the crude oil and dig up nuclear materials on the earth. I have read an article that some companies plant trees that can produce as much CO2 as they used to produce their products. It is a very clever idea. We must destroy the environment in order to survive since human is not a positive existence for nature. However, we can alleviate environmental destruction and compensate for nature. Energy companies cannot stop producing energy from nature. But they can find new energy production methods that are less consuming and less environmentally damaging. Furthermore, they have to care environment additionally through some alternatives such as planting trees or another environmental conservation business. Companies and customers should take responsibility for the cost.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], 
I had fun talking with you about renewable energy sources that  I had to give you this topic for homework. Anyway, thanks for responding quickly and for giving more insights about this subject.
-Rachel
I think they should do that. They have to care about the environment and prepare future energy sources.
>> correct
I understand that energy-related companies destroy the environment to produce energy that we can use.
>> correct 
They drill the crude oil and dig up nuclear materials on the earth.
>> They drill for crude oil and  set up nuclear plants on the earth. 
I have read an article that some companies plant trees that can produce as much CO2 as they used to produce their products.
>> correct
It is a very clever idea.
>> correct
We must destroy the environment in order to survive since human is not a positive existence for nature.
>> correct
However, we can alleviate environmental destruction and compensate for nature.
>> correct
Energy companies cannot stop producing energy from nature.
>> correct
But they can find new energy production methods that are less consuming and less environmentally damaging.
>> correct
Furthermore, they have to care environment additionally through some alternatives such as planting trees or another environmental conservation business.
>> Furthermore, they have to care for the environment through additional alternatives such as planting more tree or doing other environmental friendly businesses. 
Companies and customers should take responsibility for the cost.
>> correct

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