5-23th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
When we get married, we need some money for buying a house.
The type of house is various and so expensive.
In Korea, even if its type is various, flats are very popular and expensive.
I think the reason why it is very expensive is that we live in urban.
The city's population is very dense but the area is not large.
There must be some convenient facilities like hospitals, stations, stadiums, etc.
And the city must have a lot of house for citizen.
Even if the are is limited, there are many things in it.
So, the cost of house in urban would be higher than in rural.
And the typical type of house in Korea is a flat, it is called by an apartment.
I live in apartment too.
It is very convenient to live for all season.
When I was glowing up, I hated to wash my face in winter.
There was a little hot water outside but it was not in the bathroom.
I always went out every morning, even though it was very cold.
But in the apartment I don't need to go out to wash my face.
But it is like a box.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
I think living in an apartment is more convenient for people in Korea simply because the space is very limited.
In my country, people have the luxury to own their house and lots at a very cheap price because the land area is big enough to accommodate a lot of people.
Anyhow, that is the situation here.
I hope you\'re doing great.
See you on Thursday.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
When we get married, we need some money for buying a house.>> CORRECT!
OR >> When we get married, we need some money to buy a house.
The type of house is various and so expensive.
The type of house is various and so expensive.
>> The types of houses are various and are so expensive.
In Korea, even if its type is various, flats are very popular and expensive.
In Korea, even if its type is various, flats are very popular and expensive.
>> In Korea, even if its types are various, flats are very popular and expensive.
I think the reason why it is very expensive is that we live in urban.
I think the reason why it is very expensive is that we live in urban.
>> I think the reason why it is very expensive is that we live in the urban.
The city\'s population is very dense but the area is not large.
The city\'s population is very dense but the area is not large.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The city is crowded but but the area is not large.
There must be some convenient facilities like hospitals, stations, stadiums, etc.
There must be some convenient facilities like hospitals, stations, stadiums, etc.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> There must be some convenient facilities like hospitals, stations, stadiums, and others.
And the city must have a lot of house for citizen.
And the city must have a lot of house for citizen.
>> In addition, the city must have a lot of houses for the citizens.
Even if the are is limited, there are many things in it.
Even if the are is limited, there are many things in it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Even if the are is limited, we can find many things in it.
So, the cost of house in urban would be higher than in rural.
So, the cost of house in urban would be higher than in rural.
>> So, the cost of a house in the urban would be higher than in the rural.
And the typical type of house in Korea is a flat, it is called by an apartment.
And the typical type of house in Korea is a flat, it is called by an apartment.
>> The typical type of house in Korea is a flat and it is called an apartment.
I live in apartment too.
I live in apartment too.
>> I live in an apartment too.
It is very convenient to live for all season.
It is very convenient to live for all season.
>> It is a very convenient place to live for all seasons.
When I was glowing up, I hated to wash my face in winter.
When I was glowing up, I hated to wash my face in winter.
>> When I was growing up, I hated to wash my face in winter.
There was a little hot water outside but it was not in the bathroom.
There was a little hot water outside but it was not in the bathroom.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The hot water was not found in the bathroom.
I always went out every morning, even though it was very cold.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I endured going out every morning, even though it was very cold.
But in the apartment I don\'t need to go out to wash my face.
But in the apartment I don\'t need to go out to wash my face.
>> But in the apartment, I don\'t need to go out to wash my face.
But it is like a box.
But it is like a box.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But the apartment looks like a box.
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