5-25th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
Do you like to have a social relationship?
Do you have any social club participating in now?
What do you think the liquor is needed for easily having the social relationship?
I have felt the need of the social club for the relationship as times go by.
In an office, there is also some relationship with colleagues.
Because this is not concrete, if we retire, this would disappear promptly.
Of course, I have also friends but they live far away so that we meet just once a year.
I don't have any social club that I participate in.
If I score my social relationship, it would be "F".
Even if the social score is not, the relationship in the office is very good.
So, I don't disappoint with the social score.
Anyway, I want to find a specific social club for having good relationship.
The most popular club in Korea is a climbing mountain club.
Every weekend they go to climb a mountain and then they drink a lot of liquor.
My weakness is the liquor, so I will very hard to do it continuously.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! :)
I understand why you have the need to enhance your social relationship.
I guess most people feel that way as they age.
I think there are other ways to increase and improve your social circles without having to consume too much alcohol.
In the Philippines, sports club and arts club are very popular.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
Do you like to have a social relationship?
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Would you like to have a social relationship?
Do you have any social club participating in now?
>> Do you have any social club you are participating in now?
What do you think the liquor is needed for easily having the social relationship?
>> What do you think about the influence of liquor in having an easy social relationship?
I have felt the need of the social club for the relationship as times go by.
>> [Do you mean]: I have felt the need of joining a social club to enhance my social relationship as times go by.
In an office, there is also some relationship with colleagues.
>> In an office, there is also some relationships with colleagues.
Because this is not concrete, if we retire, this would disappear promptly.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Because this is not concrete, would disappear promptly after we retire.
Of course, I have also friends but they live far away so that we meet just once a year.
>> Of course, I also have friends but they live far away and we only/just meet once a year.
I don\'t have any social club that I participate in.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I am not a member of any social club.
If I score my social relationship, it would be \"F\".
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think my score in social relationship would be \"F\".
Even if the social score is not, the relationship in the office is very good.
>> Even if the social score is not good, my relationship with my coworkers in the office is very good.
So, I don\'t disappoint with the social score.
>> So, I am not disappointed with my social score.
Anyway, I want to find a specific social club for having good relationship.
>> Anyway, I want to find a specific social club to develop a good social relationship.
The most popular club in Korea is a climbing mountain club.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> A climbing mountain club is the most popular type of club in Korea.
Every weekend they go to climb a mountain and then they drink a lot of liquor.
>> Every weekend they climb a mountain and then they drink a lot of liquor.
My weakness is the liquor, so I will very hard to do it continuously.
>> My weakness is liquor, so it will be very hard for me to do it continuously.
I understand why you have the need to enhance your social relationship.
I guess most people feel that way as they age.
I think there are other ways to increase and improve your social circles without having to consume too much alcohol.
In the Philippines, sports club and arts club are very popular.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you tomorrow. ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
Do you like to have a social relationship?
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Would you like to have a social relationship?
Do you have any social club participating in now?
>> Do you have any social club you are participating in now?
What do you think the liquor is needed for easily having the social relationship?
>> What do you think about the influence of liquor in having an easy social relationship?
I have felt the need of the social club for the relationship as times go by.
>> [Do you mean]: I have felt the need of joining a social club to enhance my social relationship as times go by.
In an office, there is also some relationship with colleagues.
>> In an office, there is also some relationships with colleagues.
Because this is not concrete, if we retire, this would disappear promptly.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Because this is not concrete, would disappear promptly after we retire.
Of course, I have also friends but they live far away so that we meet just once a year.
>> Of course, I also have friends but they live far away and we only/just meet once a year.
I don\'t have any social club that I participate in.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I am not a member of any social club.
If I score my social relationship, it would be \"F\".
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think my score in social relationship would be \"F\".
Even if the social score is not, the relationship in the office is very good.
>> Even if the social score is not good, my relationship with my coworkers in the office is very good.
So, I don\'t disappoint with the social score.
>> So, I am not disappointed with my social score.
Anyway, I want to find a specific social club for having good relationship.
>> Anyway, I want to find a specific social club to develop a good social relationship.
The most popular club in Korea is a climbing mountain club.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> A climbing mountain club is the most popular type of club in Korea.
Every weekend they go to climb a mountain and then they drink a lot of liquor.
>> Every weekend they climb a mountain and then they drink a lot of liquor.
My weakness is the liquor, so I will very hard to do it continuously.
>> My weakness is liquor, so it will be very hard for me to do it continuously.
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