5-28th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
It suddenly snowed and it abruptly stopped.
It was a first snow in this year.
Everybody are always looking forward to seeing the first snow.
It snowed and it is like a shower in summer.
The entering examination for universities that was postponed was taken today.
In every year, the temperature always become low at the examination day while the temperature haven't low.
I'm sure that there is no exception.
For the exam, my working time was delayed in 1 hour.
Nowadays, I changed the desk that is in the office.
The desk have a feature that is to be able to change its height.
When we work in the office, we always sit on the chair.
After we worked for a long time, we should take a rest taking off the chair.
However, we didn't do that, it's because we forget it or we ignore it.
If it is accumulated for a long time, it would become a sick.
Even if you are working hard, I recommend that you have to stand up for a short time, it is about 10 minutes.
It is worthy to have a time for your health.
강사 첨삭
Hi, [이름]!
I guess it will soon be at freezing point in your area.
Please stay warm and safe. :)
Thank you for writing this essay.
Thank you for writing this essay.
It is true that we should spend some time in pampering and taking good care of our health/body.
We only have one body and we don\'t get another one after it wastes away.
Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.
See you again next week! ^^
~Teacher C[이름]
It suddenly snowed and it abruptly stopped.>> CORRECT!
OR >> It suddenly snowed but it abruptly stopped.
It was a first snow in this year.
It was a first snow in this year.
>> It was the first snow for this year.
Everybody are always looking forward to seeing the first snow.
Everybody are always looking forward to seeing the first snow.
>> Everybody is always looking forward to seeing the first snow.
It snowed and it is like a shower in summer.
It snowed and it is like a shower in summer.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It snowed and it looks like a shower in summer.
The entering examination for universities that was postponed was taken today.
The entering examination for universities that was postponed was taken today.
>> The entrance examination for universities which was postponed last week took place today.
In every year, the temperature always become low at the examination day while the temperature haven\'t low.
In every year, the temperature always become low at the examination day while the temperature haven\'t low.
>> Every year, the temperature always lowers during the examination day but yesterday, the temperature didn\'t lower down.
I\'m sure that there is no exception.
I\'m sure that there is no exception.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I know that there is no exception.
For the exam, my working time was delayed in 1 hour.
For the exam, my working time was delayed in 1 hour.
>> Because of the exam, my working time was delayed for one hour.
Nowadays, I changed the desk that is in the office.
Nowadays, I changed the desk that is in the office.
>> [Do you mean]: Nowadays, I use another desk in the office.
The desk have a feature that is to be able to change its height.
The desk have a feature that is to be able to change its height.
>> The desk has a feature of changing its height.
When we work in the office, we always sit on the chair.
When we work in the office, we always sit on the chair.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> At work, we always use a chair to do our task.
After we worked for a long time, we should take a rest taking off the chair.
After we worked for a long time, we should take a rest taking off the chair.
>> After we work for a long time, we should take a rest and leave our chairs.
However, we didn\'t do that, it\'s because we forget it or we ignore it.
However, we didn\'t do that, it\'s because we forget it or we ignore it.
>> However, we didn\'t do that because we (either) forget it or we ignore it.
If it is accumulated for a long time, it would become a sick.
If it is accumulated for a long time, it would become a sick.
>> [Do you mean]: If it happens often, we could get sick.
Even if you are working hard, I recommend that you have to stand up for a short time, it is about 10 minutes.
Even if you are working hard, I recommend that you have to stand up for a short time, it is about 10 minutes.
>> Even if you are working hard, I recommend that you have to stand up for a short time even just for about 10 minutes.
It is worthy to have a time for your health.
It is worthy to have a time for your health.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is great to have some time for your health.
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