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2020-05-31 · 첨삭 강사 Rachel

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Personal routine is very helpful for personal mental health and important for marriage last long. I thought I will do everything together with my husband if I getting married before I got married. However, I realized that doing together and sharing personal activities are good for a deep relationship, but it is not necessary. I think we should open everything and do not make a secret. But, we don\'t need to do all together, such as a hobby. Moreover, I believe when I have a healthy mental condition, I can make healthy love, not the tenacity of love or blind love. So, it\'s important to keep my personal and family dreams and share my husband. We can find a proper way to have a happy life. And, another thing for marriage last longer is trusting each other. I know that suspicion makes another new suspicion and the end of the way is distrust. And I remember a famous talent\'s saying, \"every love is very similar\". It means that no matter who I marry, my personality greatly affects my marriage.

강사 첨삭

Hi [이름], 
Truly, it takes effort for both partners to work on the marriage. I guess it is just easy to get married but maintaining the relationship is a challenge. Thank you for sharing this insight on marriage. Although I am not married, I know that all relationships need to be worked out in order to be strengthened. 
-Rachel 
Personal routine is very helpful for personal mental health and important for marriage last long.
>> Personal routine is very helpful for personal mental health and important for a long lasting marriage. 
I thought I will do everything together with my husband if I getting married before I got married.
>> I thought I would do everything together with my husband if I get married with him when I was single. 
However, I realized that doing together and sharing personal activities are good for a deep relationship, but it is not necessary.
>> correct
I think we should open everything and do not make a secret.
>> I think we should be open to each other about everything and should not keep secrets. 
But, we don\'t need to do all together, such as a hobby.
>> But we don\'t have to all things together such as doing our hobbies. 
Moreover, I believe when I have a healthy mental condition, I can make healthy love, not the tenacity of love or blind love.
>> Moreover, if we have a healthy mind or mentality, we can have healthy relationships and not be forced to love. 
So, it\'s important to keep my personal and family dreams and share my husband.
>> So it\'s important to keep my personal and family dreams, but also to share them with my husband. 
We can find a proper way to have a happy life.
>> correct
And, another thing for marriage last longer is trusting each other.
>> And another thing that could make a marriage last longer is to trust each other.
I know that suspicion makes another new suspicion and the end of the way is distrust.
>> I know that suspicion leads to another suspicion and the end result is distrust. 
And I remember a famous talent\'s saying, \"every love is very similar\".
>> And I remember a famous saying from a talent (celebrity), \"All kinds of love  are similar. 
It means that no matter who I marry, my personality greatly affects my marriage.
>> correct

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