5.3 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
hw - What new hobby would you like to try in the future?
Since I have many static hobbies that I enjoy these days such as studying, writing or reading, I\'d love to have more dynamic and active hobbies in the future. For instance, there are some extreme sports like paragliding, skydiving or something like that which came to my mind. They sound really scary and thrilling but I hope to get a chance to try first. And plus, my boyfriend and I are planning to learn how to golf as long as we can afford it because we both like to try new things and my parents are really into it. If we can to play golf, we will be able to enjoy the hobby altogether spending great time. hope we can go to a field and have fun together soon!
강사 첨삭
It\'s really good to have new adventures, Elena! I\'m sure you can try them. Happy weekend! -Faith-
hw - What new hobby would you like to try in the future?>> CORRECT
Since I have many static hobbies that I enjoy these days such as studying, writing or reading, I\'d love to have more dynamic and active hobbies in the future.
Since I have many static hobbies that I enjoy these days such as studying, writing or reading, I\'d love to have more dynamic and active hobbies in the future.
>> CORRECT
For instance, there are some extreme sports like paragliding, skydiving or something like that which came to my mind.
>> CORRECT
They sound really scary and thrilling but I hope to get a chance to try first.
>> They sound risky and thrilling at the same time but I would like to give it a try.
And plus, my boyfriend and I are planning to learn how to golf as long as we can afford it because we both like to try new things and my parents are really into it.
>> Plus, my boyfriend and I are planning to learn how to golf as long as we can afford it because we both like to try new things and my parents are really into it.
If we can to play golf, we will be able to enjoy the hobby altogether spending great time.
>> If we can play golf, we will be able to enjoy the hobby altogether spending great time.
hope we can go to a field and have fun together soon!
>> I hope we can go to a golf course and have fun together soon!
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