5/3 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
This is an old issue in Korea.
The population density who live in Seoul is increased a lot.
Almost one in five in Korea\' population is living in Seoul, however, Seoul is a small city.
Although nowadays the population is decreasing due to the high living cost, still the population is dense.
Many farmers employ foreign workers, since the people who are working in the countryside.
Originally Korea has been sold domestic agricultural products, but, the amount is decreasing and we can find many imported ones.
I think that the strong dependence of the food is very dangerous for the nation\'s future.
Now, we can find cheap rice and corns very easily, but we don\'t know when it will be expensive unexpectedly.
In my parents\' period, many people respect the person who wears the suit and works in the urban city and wants to be like them.
However, nowadays, quite many people who tired in the city life want to live in the countryside with farming.
Sometimes, I also think like that.
강사 첨삭
Hi [이름]! Thank you for accomplishing your homework. I appreciate it a lot! ^ ^
You gave good thoughts on this one. Good job! ^ ^
-Teacher Jedah
This is an old issue in Korea.
>>Correct
The population density who live in Seoul is increased a lot.
The population density who live in Seoul is increased a lot.
>>The population density in Seoul has increased a lot.
Almost one in five in Korea\' population is living in Seoul, however, Seoul is a small city.
Almost one in five in Korea\' population is living in Seoul, however, Seoul is a small city.
>>However small, Seoul has the largest population among the cities and provinces in Korea.
Although nowadays the population is decreasing due to the high living cost, still the population is dense.
Although nowadays the population is decreasing due to the high living cost, still the population is dense.
>>Although the population in general has decreased in Korea due to the high cost of living, the population in Seoul is still dense.
Many farmers employ foreign workers, since the people who are working in the countryside.
Many farmers employ foreign workers, since the people who are working in the countryside.
>>Many farmers employ foreign workers since there are a few number of people living in the countryside.
Originally Korea has been sold domestic agricultural products, but, the amount is decreasing and we can find many imported ones.
Originally Korea has been sold domestic agricultural products, but, the amount is decreasing and we can find many imported ones.
>>Originally Korea has been selling domestic agricultural products, but, these days we can find more imported ones.
I think that the strong dependence of the food is very dangerous for the nation\'s future.
I think that the strong dependence of the food is very dangerous for the nation\'s future.
>>I think that the strong dependence on food is dangerous to a nations\' future.
Now, we can find cheap rice and corns very easily, but we don\'t know when it will be expensive unexpectedly.
Now, we can find cheap rice and corns very easily, but we don\'t know when it will be expensive unexpectedly.
>>Now, it\'s easy to buy cheap rice and corn, but we don\'t know when their prices will increase abruptly.
In my parents\' period, many people respect the person who wears the suit and works in the urban city and wants to be like them.
In my parents\' period, many people respect the person who wears the suit and works in the urban city and wants to be like them.
>>During my parents time, they look up to people who wear suits and work in the urban city and would want to be just like them.
However, nowadays, quite many people who tired in the city life want to live in the countryside with farming.
However, nowadays, quite many people who tired in the city life want to live in the countryside with farming.
>>However, nowadays, quite many people are tired in the city life and would want to live in the countryside and do farming instead.
파워잉글리쉬 영어첨삭교정 서비스에 실제로 접수된 글입니다. 작성자와 글에 등장하는 사람·회사 이름, 연락처 등 개인을 알아볼 수 있는 정보는 모두 지웠습니다. 문법 오류는 학습 자료로서의 가치를 위해 원문 그대로 두었습니다.