5-30th Homework
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The winter sports that we can easily enjoy is the ski and the skating.
The most popular thing in both is the ski.
Many years ago, the ski slope was very rare so that we could not easily use.
And my parents didn't know the ski and they had to earn money to live.
So, I didn't know how to ski and I didn't think about skiing in winter.
Of course, the skate rink is also rare until now.
Nowadays, we plan to go to a ski resort every year.
When my kids was very young, we couldn't think about that ever.
After they go to school and we plan the ski schedule every year.
I think it is very good for my family because we can enjoy it together.
Sometimes, we go to the ski camp with another family together.
Whenever I start to ski, it make me to be nervous.
After finishing the ski, I feel the ache happening from my all body.
But it is a nice time since we can enjoy the winter with a sports.
So, I hope that I ski at the long slope that it would be taken for a hour to down.
There is not in Korea.
강사 첨삭
Hello there [이름]! ^_^
It\'s Friday again!
It\'s Friday again!
We were not able to study today but I hope you\'re doing great.
Thank you for sharing about your favorite sports in winter. ^_^
I think skiing is a really exhilarating sport.
I think skiing is a really exhilarating sport.
I would love to try it one day. kkk.
I hope my knees would be strong enough to support my balance. ^_^
Anyhow, see you again on Tuesday.
Stay warm and safe.
~Teacher C[이름]
The winter sports that we can easily enjoy is the ski and the skating.>> The winter sports that we can easily enjoy are skiing and skating.
The most popular thing in both is the ski.
The most popular thing in both is the ski.
>> The more popular one between the two would be skiing.
Many years ago, the ski slope was very rare so that we could not easily use.
Many years ago, the ski slope was very rare so that we could not easily use.
>> Many years ago, a ski slope was very rare so we could not easily use one.
And my parents didn\'t know the ski and they had to earn money to live.
And my parents didn\'t know the ski and they had to earn money to live.
>> In addition, my parents didn\'t know how to ski and they had to earn money to live.
So, I didn\'t know how to ski and I didn\'t think about skiing in winter.
So, I didn\'t know how to ski and I didn\'t think about skiing in winter.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> So, I didn\'t know how to ski and I haven\'t thought about skiing in winter.
Of course, the skate rink is also rare until now.
Of course, the skate rink is also rare until now.
>> Of course, the skating rink is also rare until now.
Nowadays, we plan to go to a ski resort every year.
Nowadays, we plan to go to a ski resort every year.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Right now, we intend to go to a ski resort every year.
When my kids was very young, we couldn\'t think about that ever.
When my kids was very young, we couldn\'t think about that ever.
>> When my kids were very young, we couldn\'t think about that ever.
After they go to school and we plan the ski schedule every year.
After they go to school and we plan the ski schedule every year.
>> When they started going to school, we also started planing for our ski schedule every year.
I think it is very good for my family because we can enjoy it together.
I think it is very good for my family because we can enjoy it together.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I think it is great for my family because we can enjoy it together.
Sometimes, we go to the ski camp with another family together.
Sometimes, we go to the ski camp with another family together.
>> Sometimes, we go to the ski camp together with another family.
Whenever I start to ski, it make me to be nervous.
Whenever I start to ski, it make me to be nervous.
>> Whenever I start to ski, I also feel nervous.
After finishing the ski, I feel the ache happening from my all body.
After finishing the ski, I feel the ache happening from my all body.
>> After finishing skiing, I feel the ache all over my body.
But it is a nice time since we can enjoy the winter with a sports.
But it is a nice time since we can enjoy the winter with a sports.
>> But it is a nice time since we can enjoy the winter with sports.
So, I hope that I ski at the long slope that it would be taken for a hour to down.
So, I hope that I ski at the long slope that it would be taken for a hour to down.
>> So, I hope that I could ski at a long slope which takes an hour to finish on your way down.
There is not in Korea.
>> There is no such thing in Korea.
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