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When I look at Korean news, I saw many cases of teenagers swearing in the games and going to school to find and assault people. so I think that violent games can change a person\'s personality. And there are many similar incidents of gun shooting in the US as well. I think adults should always care and teach them. Because teens lack the ability to control their own behavior.
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Hi, [이름]! Thanks for all your effort and dedication in class. Keep it up!
- Teacher Angela
When I look at Korean news, I saw many cases of teenagers swearing in the games and going to school to find and assault people.
>> When I look at Korean news, I see many cases of teenagers swearing in games and then going to school to find and assault people.
so I think that violent games can change a person\'s personality.
>> CORRECT
And there are many similar incidents of gun shooting in the US as well.
>> And there are many similar incidents of gun shootings in the US as well.
I think adults should always care and teach them.
>> I think adults should always care for and teach them.
Because teens lack the ability to control their own behavior.
>> CORRECT
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