5-34th Homework

2017-12-15 · 첨삭 강사 Charry

학생이 쓴 원문

It's very cold, today. I have to go to a business trip in a week. The trip is for presenting my paper in English. The time that is given to me is about 15 minutes, it's very short. When I gave a presentation in English for the first time, it seemed to be very long. So, after presenting I felt tired. I'm not sure what I feel after finishing it. But I have been studying English for two years in speaking, writing. In order to get some rewards from my efforts, I will prepare it well. And I will slowly speak at the conference room in order to well send my message and to understand my words myself. Sometimes, I fast spoke even if I could not well do it. In my deep mind, I want to show my ability and I want not to be shown as a beginner. As a result, I speedy speak even if there are many errors. After doing that, I am always disappointed myself. Anyway, doing well is always good but it will take a long time. So, we have to wait patiently as doing something. That is a correct answer.

강사 첨삭

Hi, [이름]!
Thank you for taking the time to write an essay. 
I just want to tell you that you\'ve already come a long way in studying English and I am proud of your improvement. 
I sincerely hope all of your efforts would pay off in that conference. 
I believe in you. I believe that you can do it. 
Prepare well and break a leg! :)
I hope you\'re having a great day. 
See you again next week. 
~Teacher C[이름] 
It\'s very cold, today.
>> It\'s very cold today.
I have to go to a business trip in a week.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I have to go to a business trip a week after.
The trip is for presenting my paper in English.
>> The trip is for the presentation of my paper in English.
The time that is given to me is about 15 minutes, it\'s very short.
>> The time that is given to me is about 15 minutes. It\'s very short.
When I gave a presentation in English for the first time, it seemed to be very long.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> When I gave a presentation in English for the first time, it seemed to go on forever.
So, after presenting I felt tired.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> So, after the presentation, I felt tired.
I\'m not sure what I feel after finishing it.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I don\'t know what to feel after finishing it.
But I have been studying English for two years in speaking, writing.
>> But I have been studying how to speak and write in English for two years.
In order to get some rewards from my efforts, I will prepare it well.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In order to get some rewards for my efforts, I will prepare well. 
And I will slowly speak at the conference room in order to well send my message and to understand my words myself.
>> [Do you mean]: I will also slowly speak at the conference room in order to send/convey my message well to the audience. 
Sometimes, I fast spoke even if I could not well do it.
>> Sometimes, I speak fast even if I could not do it well.
In my deep mind, I want to show my ability and I want not to be shown as a beginner.
>> In my mind, I want to show my ability to speak well and not look like a beginner. 
As a result, I speedy speak even if there are many errors.
>> As a result, I spoke fast even if there were many errors.
After doing that, I am always disappointed myself.
>> After doing that, I am always disappointed with myself.
Anyway, doing well is always good but it will take a long time.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> Anyway, doing great is always good but it will take a some time.
So, we have to wait patiently as doing something.
>> So, we have to wait patiently in doing something.
That is a correct answer.
>> CORRECT!

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