5-35th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
When we think about the green house effect that makes the earth worm, we would eventually live in the hot weather even if the season is a winter.
We have experienced the worm winter every year, so I misunderstand that it seem to be true.
However, this winter might be more colder than some previous winter according to some forecast.
Caused by the green house effect, the cold air of the north pole moves toward south.
In Korea, there is a maxim on the winter weather.
It is that three days are cold and then four days are worm.
Nowadays, it is not true since seven days are cold and then one day is worm.
When I was young, after snowing, the snow was promptly melted by the worm air from the sun.
I was very disappointed it since we could not play any more with the snow.
The first thing that we did when it snowed was making a snow man.
Sometimes, we built a castle to protect myself when we throw some snow balls.
But it didn't last for a day.
The temperature would go high so that all is melted.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]! :)
Thank you for diligently writing an essay over the weekend.
Thank you for diligently writing an essay over the weekend.
I think global warming is a serious matter.
We might not feel the detrimental effects of it at the moment but pretty soon, it would catch on with our children and grand children.
I wish each of us would do our part in conserving our environment.
Anyhow, I heard it\'s freezing cold out there.
Please stay warm and safe.
See you again tomorrow.
~Teacher C[이름] :)
When we think about the green house effect that makes the earth worm, we would eventually live in the hot weather even if the season is a winter.>> When we don\'t think about the green house effect that makes the earth warm, we would eventually live in a hot weather even if the season is winter.
We have experienced the worm winter every year, so I misunderstand that it seem to be true.
We have experienced the worm winter every year, so I misunderstand that it seem to be true.
>> [Do you mean]: We have been experiencing a warm winter every year but I didn\'t believe that it\'s true.
However, this winter might be more colder than some previous winter according to some forecast.
However, this winter might be more colder than some previous winter according to some forecast.
>> However, this winter might be colder than the previous winters according to some forecasts.
Caused by the green house effect, the cold air of the north pole moves toward south.
>> Caused by the green house effect, the cold air in the north pole moves towards the south.
In Korea, there is a maxim on the winter weather.
In Korea, there is a maxim on the winter weather.
>> In Korea, there is a maxim about the winter.
It is that three days are cold and then four days are worm.
It is that three days are cold and then four days are worm.
>> It is that, for three days it is cold and then for four days it is warm.
Nowadays, it is not true since seven days are cold and then one day is worm.
>> Nowadays, it is not true since it is cold for seven days and only warm for one day.
When I was young, after snowing, the snow was promptly melted by the worm air from the sun.
When I was young, after snowing, the snow was promptly melted by the worm air from the sun.
>> When I was young, after snowing, the snow promptly melted because of the warm air and the sun.
I was very disappointed it since we could not play any more with the snow.
I was very disappointed it since we could not play any more with the snow.
>> I was very disappointed since we could not play anymore with the snow.
The first thing that we did when it snowed was making a snow man.
The first thing that we did when it snowed was making a snow man.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> The first thing that we did when it snowed was to make a snow man.
Sometimes, we built a castle to protect myself when we throw some snow balls.
Sometimes, we built a castle to protect myself when we throw some snow balls.
>> Sometimes, we built a castle to protect ourselves when we throw some snow balls.
But it didn\'t last for a day.
But it didn\'t last for a day.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> But the castle didn\'t last for a day.
The temperature would go high so that all is melted.
The temperature would go high so that all is melted.
>> The temperature would go high so that all snow is melted.
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