5-38th Homework

Hello, [이름]! :)
How are you doing so far?

Thank you for writing this essay. 

I think it is true that we need to be conscious about our health even if we are young and strong. 

Unfortunately, many people fail to realize the importance of doing this. 

I\'m glad to know that you\'re doing your best to stay strong and healthy even as you age. 

I hope you\'re doing great. 

See you tomorrow in class. 

Stay happy and smiling. 

~Teacher C[이름] :)   

When I was young, I didn\'t so much like to enjoy outdoor activities.

>> When I was young, I didn\'t enjoy outdoor activities so much.
Of course, I played with friends on the playground.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> I also played with my friends on the playground.
As I was growing up, I became to do something outside.

>> [Do you mean]: As I was growing up, I started to become wary of doing something outside.
There were some excuses, I had to study to carry out my goal that was to enter the university.

>> There were some excuses. I had to study to carry out my goal which was to enter the university.
If I think it now, it would be very ridiculous.

>> When I think of it now, I think it is very ridiculous.
As I am getting old, I feel that I want to execute some activities more.
>> CORRECT!

OR >> As I get older, I feel the need to do more activities.
 Many people consider doing something like a running, a cycle, and so on.

>>  Many people consider doing something like running, cycling, and so on.
If I think about it comparing with my case, it was very difficult to start it.

>> When I compared it with my case, it was very difficult to start it.
If you start it, you could go on.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Once you start it, you could continue doing it.
In my case, I want to enhance my muscles, especially backmuscles.

>> In my case, I want to enhance my muscles especially my back muscles.
So, I started to execute the pilates in order to reduce or dismiss my back aches.

>> So, I started to execute Pilates in order to reduce or dismiss my back aches.

I have done the pilates for about 2 years.

>> I have done Pilates for about 2 years.
I think it is an useful activity and even if you don\'t it, if you do anything, it is also useful to your body.

>> [Do you mean]: I think it is a useful activity and even if you don\'t routinely do it, it is still useful to your body.
We could not feel the neediness of the physical activity while we were young.

>> We could not feel the neediness of physical activity while we are young.
But the age make us feel the neediness.

>> But the age makes us feel the neediness to do it.