5-3rd Homework

Hello there [이름]! :)
Thank you for once again writing an essay.

I agree that having a plan and a back up plan when carrying out something is very important.

This is because, it helps you be systematic and keep things in order.

I personally believe in the power of proper scheduling and planning.

Anyhow, I hope you\'re doing great.

See you again next week.

Take care.

~Teacher C[이름] :)

Everybody sets up the new schedule on the first day of the year.

>> Everybody sets up a new schedule on the first day of the year.

Someone wants to stop the smoking, someone wants to exercise for lessening the weight.

>> Someone wants to stop smoking and someone wants to exercise for lessening the weight.

Before the first day of the year starts, the desire that they have is very strong.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> The desire that they have is very strong before the first day of the year starts.

Nonetheless, the day that the desire last is very short.

>> [Do you mean]: Nonetheless, the time that they have a strong desire only lasts for a very short time.

it may be 2 or 3 days.

>> Maybe it only lasts for 2 or 3 days.

So, many people could not accomplish their desire of plan.

>> So, many people could not accomplish their desired plan.

So, someone says like that if you want to successfully execute something without giving up, you would set up the plan every 3 days.

>> So, someone says that if you want to successfully execute something without giving up, you shoul set up the plan every 3 days.

After setting up the plan, the desire that we wanted to carry out something would be lessen.

>> After setting up the plan, the desire to carry out something would be lessened.

The duration time your determination may be 3 days.

>> The determination time may be 3 days.

So, at that time you try to schedule again.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> So at that time, you attempt to make a schedule again.

It\'s a fantastic plan, isn\'t it?

>> CORRECT!

OR >> It\'s a great plan, right?

Anyway, the plan we set up every year would be needed for us.

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Anyway, the plan we set up every year would be important for us.

It\'s because you feel the need of the plan you set up.

>> It\'s because you feel the need for the plan you (have) set up.

In the other point, we set up the schedule for doing it future.

>> On the other point, we set up a schedule we will be doing in the future.

Anyway, the plan for my future would be carried out myself is important to me.

>> [Do you mean]: Anyway, the plan for my future would be important for me to be carried out.