5-41th Homework

Hello, [이름]! ^_^
This is a great essay. 

Thank you for writing it. 

I think the aurora lights are amazing. 

I\'ve never seen it before but I\'m blessed to see the sky full of stars every night in my city. 

Star gazing is one of my favorite activities. ^_^
Anyhow, I hope your plans will push through.

See you again tomorrow.

~Teacher C[이름] :)

Have you ever seen the aurora in the sky?

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Have you ever experienced watching the aurora in the sky?
Or have you ever seen the milky way in the dark sky?

>> CORRECT!

OR >> Or have you ever experienced watching the milky way in the dark sky?
Actually, the aurora is very special it\'s because it is only happened in the polar region.

>> Actually, the aurora is very special because it only happens in the polar region.
However, if the sky is fine and there is no light in the night, we could see the milky way.

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OR >> On the other hand, if the sky is fine and there is no light in the night, we could see the milky way.
But the milky way in the sky is hardly seen because of the pollution of the light.

>> But the milky way in the sky is hardly seen because of light pollution.
Anyway, my theme today is not related with the pollution.

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OR >> Anyway, this essay is not about pollution.
My topic is the aurora that we can see only in the polar region.

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OR >> My topic is about the aurora which can only be seen in the polar region.
Discussing about the travel with my wife, the aurora was arisen as the topic.

>> While discussing about a travel with my wife, the aurora was raised as the topic.
The aurora in the polar region is very not easy to be seen.

>> The aurora in the polar region is not very easy to be seen.
If we want to observe it, we have to go into the deep mountain.

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OR >> If we want to see it, we need to go into the deep mountain.
The chance that we can observe the aurora at once is very rare so that we have to go there several time.

>> The chance that we can observe the aurora at once is very rare so we have to go there several times.
In my plans, there are two things related with the sky.

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OR >> There are two things related with the sky in my plans.
The first thing is to go the Uyuni dessert in Bolivia in order to see the galaxy, the second thing is to see the aurora at the polar region.

>> The first thing is to go to the Uyuni dessert in Bolivia in order to see the galaxy and the second thing is to see the aurora at the polar region.