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2016-10-07 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

My country has many holidays, for examples, Lunar New year's Day, Chuseok, Korean Tanksgiving Day, Hangul, Korean alphabet and many more. When I was young, my favorite holiday was Lunar New Year's Day because I could eat many foods. My mother and my sister made many foods for many guests and for our ancestors. I had to wait to eat but I always fell asleep. I think the biggest holiday in my country is Lunar New year's Day. Most Korean people usually meet at the home of the oldest man in the family. They play traditional Korean games together and eat a lot of food. When I was young, I really liked this time. However I don't like Kunar New year's Day because I have to make many foods for guests like my mother. During the holidays, many Korean people cook traditional food together. They also eat various kinds of food like songpyeon and tteokguk. Families and relatives get together during the holidays. Also they visit the graves of their ancestors to pay their respects.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!

I think this is your longest composition so far. Thank you for always answering your homework. You really are a diligent student! Have a great weekend. See you on Monday!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

My country has many holidays, for examples, Lunar New year\'s Day, Chuseok, Korean Tanksgiving Day, Hangul, Korean alphabet and many more.

>> My country has many holidays, for example, we have the Lunar New year\'s Day, Chuseok, Korean Thanksgiving Day, Hangul, Korean alphabet and many more.

When I was young, my favorite holiday was Lunar New Year\'s Day because I could eat many food.

>> correct!
My mother and my sister made many foods for many guests and for our ancestors.

>> My mother and my sister made many food for our guests and our ancestors.
I had to wait to eat but I always fell asleep.
>> correct!
I think the biggest holiday in my country is Lunar New year\'s Day.

>> correct!
Most Korean people usually meet at the home of the oldest man in the family.

>> correct!
They play traditional Korean games together and eat a lot of food.

>> correct1
When I was young, I really liked this time.

>> correct!
However, I don\'t like Lunar New year\'s Day because I have to make many food for guests like my mother.
>>
However, I don\'t like Lunar New year\'s Day now because I have to make many food for  our guests just like my mother before.

During the holidays, many Korean people cook traditional food together.

>> correct!
They also eat various kinds of food like Songpyeon and Tteokguk.

>> correct!
Families and relatives get together during the holidays.

>> correct!
Also they visit the graves of their ancestors to pay their respects.

>> correct!

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