5/7 homework
학생이 쓴 원문
[How do you keep a healthy body and mind?]
I think that there are so many people having an unhealthy mind in modern times.
Our lives become more convenient, but sometimes it makes us boring or lethargic.
Moreover, people\'s expectation or work increases continuously, since we can do more things.
It gives us too much stress.
Therefore, I think meditation or temple stying is popular nowadays.
Often many people want to escape from their real world.
But, it is impossible for most general people.
So, in my case, I write something in my own private note when I feel stressful or unhealthy emotionally.
It can be my future what I want to be or just my feeling right now or anger to someone or something.
When I write about that, I feel to calm down and relax.
This method is a very easy and comfortable way to solve my bad thinking in my mind.
강사 첨삭
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-Teacher Jedah
>>I think that there are so many people having an unhealthy mind these days.
Our lives become more convenient, but sometimes it makes us boring or lethargic.
Our lives become more convenient, but sometimes it makes us boring or lethargic.
>>Our lives have become more convenient, but sometimes it makes us boring or lethargic.
Moreover, people\'s expectation or work increases continuously, since we can do more things.
Moreover, people\'s expectation or work increases continuously, since we can do more things.
>>Correct
It gives us too much stress.
It gives us too much stress.
>>Correct
Therefore, I think meditation or temple staying is popular nowadays.
Therefore, I think meditation or temple staying is popular nowadays.
>>Correct
Often many people want to escape from their real world.
Often many people want to escape from their real world.
>>Correct
But, it is impossible for most general people.
But, it is impossible for most general people.
>>But, it is impossible for most people.
So, in my case, I write something in my own private note when I feel stressful or unhealthy emotionally.
>>So, in my case, I write something in my own private note when I feel stressed or emotionally disturbed.
It can be my future what I want to be or just my feeling right now or anger to someone or something.
>>Correct
When I write about that, I feel to calm down and relax.
When I write about that, I feel to calm down and relax.
>>When I write about it, I feel calmer and more relaxed.
This method is a very easy and comfortable way to solve my bad thinking in my mind.
This method is a very easy and comfortable way to solve my bad thinking in my mind.
>>This method is very easy and a comfortable way for me to resolve my bad thoughts.
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