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2017-01-18 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

You looked seem interest of my country's politics. You are right. Moon Jae-in is very old poiticaian also he has a lot of political experienc in my country. Ban Ki-moon is very popular and he has a lot of U.N. experienc. However many young people in my country want a new man. Lee Jae myung is one of men ans many young people prefer him. He is younger than Mr. [Name] and Mr. [Name]. And he has many the reasones to want many young people. Maybe many young people of my country want to change my country from a new man. Anyway I don't know my country's politics and it is very difficult.

강사 첨삭

Hi there Ms. [이름]!

You said you don\'t know much about your country\'s politics but you answered my question very well. Well, I guess you\'ll have to know about these presidential candidates because your election is coming very soon. See you in class!

Take care!

~T. Lynn

You looked seem interest of my country\'s politics.

>> You looked interested on my country\'s politics.

OR>> You seemed interested in my country\'s politics.
You are right.

>> correct!
Moon Jae-in is very old poiticaian also he has a lot of political experienc in my country.

>> Moon Jae-in is a very old politician and he also has a lot of political experience in my country.
Ban Ki-moon is very popular and he has a lot of U.N. experience.

>> correct!
However, many young people in my country want a new man.

>> correct
Lee Jae myung is one of men ans many young people prefer him.

>> Lee Jae Myung is one of the new men and many young people prefer men.
He is younger than Mr. [Name] and Mr. [Name].

>> correct!
And he has many the reasones to want many young people.

>> And he has many qualities that many young people like.
Maybe many young people of my country want to change my country from a new man.

>> Maybe many young people from my country want a younger man.
Anyway, I don\'t know my country\'s politics and it is very difficult.

>> correct!

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