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2017-02-27 · 첨삭 강사 Lynn

학생이 쓴 원문

In my case, when my first daughter was born, I took my niece's goods from my sister. Most parents in Korea want to give new goods for their first child. But I used secondhand goods for my first daughter and than when my youngest daugher was born, I used them again for my youngest daughter. I think it is a good way. Nowadays I donate my children's goods to the agency.

강사 첨삭

Hello, Ms. [이름]!

It\'s really hard to earn money so we must be practical and thrifty in order to save money.

Take care!

~T. Lynn

In my case, when my first daughter was born, I took my niece\'s goods from my sister.

>> correct!
Most parents in Korea want to give new goods for their first child.

>> correct!
But I used secondhand goods for my first daughter and than when my youngest daugher was born, I used them again for my youngest daughter.

>> But I used secondhand goods for my first daughter and then when my youngest daughter was born, I used them again for her.
I think it is a good way.

>> correct!
Nowadays, I donate my children\'s goods to the agency.

>> correct!

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