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Dempvracy cannot be born without blood.
Lots of coountries went through ti, and hongkong is getting throw it.
The first protest started from the extradition however lately they want independent inquiry into police and suffrage as well.
Public areas was disturbed by demonstrations including the hongkong airport.
There should be a massive inconvenience. But those are just little sacrifices to achieve big one.
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Hello, Cho. Thank you for sending your composition. Have a great Friday ahead!
-T. Matt
Dempvracy cannot be born without blood.
>>Democracy cannot be born without blood.
Lots of coountries went through ti, and hongkong is getting throw it.
Lots of coountries went through ti, and hongkong is getting throw it.
>>A lots of countries have it but Hong Kong does not want it.
The first protest started from the extradition however lately they want independent inquiry into police and suffrage as well.
The first protest started from the extradition however lately they want independent inquiry into police and suffrage as well.
>>The first protest started because of extradition, however, lately, they want an independent inquiry into police and suffrage as well.
Public areas was disturbed by demonstrations including the hongkong airport.
Public areas was disturbed by demonstrations including the hongkong airport.
>>Public areas were disturbed by demonstrators including the Hong Kong Airport.
There should be a massive inconvenience.
There should be a massive inconvenience.
>>There is widespread inconvenience.
But those are just little sacrifices to achieve big one.
>>However, those are just little sacrifices to achieve something bigger.
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