53th Homework
학생이 쓴 원문
In Korea, it is a very important behavior. It's because people in positions of authority want to know everything. And they want to make a decision. In many cases, the decision would be determined by him who has an authority, not by members. This is to break and block member's thought. There is no creativity and there is no willingness. If we are in the situation during long time, we would be a fool. We could not think about something ourselves. We just want to be taken the command from the man of the power. In case of me, I'm also Korean, therefore, I do easily like that. It's a very serious situation. I want to change my mind to more voluntary. The time I have lived like that is too long. Therefore, the habit is not easily changed. We have studied in the rote education system. We have been demanded to remember something, it's because it is for an examination. In Korea, people in positions of authority think that they are superior to others. And then they easily command to others.
강사 첨삭
Hello, [이름]!
Thank you for sharing something about this matter.
I think being knowledgeable is good but being wise is a lot better.
Instead of teaching your people to pass the exam and gain high grades, people out there should be taught how to live in accordance to the knowledge that they have.
It\'s difficult but it\'s achievable.
Many authorities in my country think that because they have the power and money, they are more superior than others which is not truly the
case.
Anyhow, this is just my point-of-view.
See you on Tuesday. ^^
~Teacher C[이름] :)
In Korea, it is a very important behavior.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It is a very important behavior in Korea.
It\'s because people in positions of authority want to know everything.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s because people in authority want to have knowledge about everything.
And they want to make a decision.
>> They want to make decisions.
In many cases, the decision would be determined by him who has an authority, not by members.
>> In many cases, the decision would be determined by him who has an authority, not by the members.
This is to break and block member\'s thought.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: This breaks and blocks a member\'s thought.
There is no creativity and there is no willingness.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> They lack creativity and willingness.
If we are in the situation during long time, we would be a fool.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: If we stay in that situation for a long time, we would be a fool.
We could not think about something ourselves.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> We would lose the initiative.
We just want to be taken the command from the man of the power.
>> We just want to be take commands from the man of power.
In case of me, I\'m also Korean, therefore, I do easily like that.
>> In my case, I\'m also a Korean. Therefore, I easily do that.
It\'s a very serious situation.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> It\'s a very critical situation.
I want to change my mind to more voluntary.
>> I want to change my mind more voluntarily.
The time I have lived like that is too long.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> I\'ve been living that way for too long.
Therefore, the habit is not easily changed.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In conclusion, this habit cannot be easily changed.
We have studied in the rote education system.
>> [DO YOU MEAN]: We have studied in a bad education system.
We have been demanded to remember something, it\'s because it is for an examination.
>> We have been forced to remember something, for the sake of passing an examination.
In Korea, people in positions of authority think that they are superior to others.
>> CORRECT!
OR >> In Korea, people in authority think they are more superior than other people.
And then they easily command to others.
>> And then they easily command others.
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